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Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v.1

Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v. 1
Nowadays, most of the business spending ample amount of money to market their products or services to attract the people much and promoting them with various offers to reach all of the people. This could affect the small or medium scale business, who could not afford much for advertisements. In this essay, I will discuss the problems cause and a solid solution to the problem which would encourage people towards domestic products. Firstly, the major cause is that affect the economic growth, when the people focus only on large company products or foreign products. By this what I mean to say is, the people who are running the small scale industry could lead to severe loss when the people in the localization not purchase their products. This may affect us economically too. For instance, India is more popular in the cloth industry, nowadays lots of foreign brands started marketing and providing various offers in India. There is a good amount of small scale industries, providing good quality products to people, although, people got attracted towards the brand name and advertisement of the large business mostly. To overcome the problem, the people themselves want to start using the local products and they could suggest them to their relatives and friends if they feel good about the product. Secondly, if this situation leads, no one will come-forward to start a business. That situation will become worse and the corporate companies will start to raise the cost of the products. To be more precise, People have to pay lots for all the day-to-day household needs which burden their livelihood. To tackle this issue, people have to support their local business by using their products that leads the local business to flourish and they will provide good quality products to the people. To sum up, local business may reduce the price tags of their products which encourage the customers to attract to them. Moreover, the government should also support the small scale industries by providing tax breaks. Although, people also have a responsibility to support the small industries by suggesting the products to their friends and neighbours, rather got attracted towards the advertisements of large companies.
Nowadays, most of the
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business
spending ample amount of money to market their
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products
or services to attract the
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people
much and promoting them with various offers to reach
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all of the
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people
. This could affect the
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small
or medium
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scale
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business
, who could not afford much for advertisements. In this essay, I will discuss the problems cause and a solid solution to the problem which would encourage
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people
towards domestic products.

Firstly
, the major cause is that affect the economic growth, when the
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people
focus
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only
on large
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company
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products
or foreign
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products
. By this what I mean to say is, the
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people
who are running the
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small
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scale
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industry
could lead to severe loss when the
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people
in the localization not
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purchase
their
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products
. This may affect us
economically
too.
For instance
, India is more popular in the cloth
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industry
, nowadays lots of foreign brands
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started
marketing and providing various offers in India. There is a
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good
amount of
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small
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scale
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industries
, providing
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good
quality
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products
to
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people
, although,
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people
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got
attracted towards the brand name and
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advertisement of
the large
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business
mostly
. To overcome the problem, the
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people
themselves want to
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start
using the
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local
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products and
they could suggest them to their relatives and friends if they feel
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good
about the product.

Secondly
, if this situation leads, no one will
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a
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business
. That situation will become worse and the corporate
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companies
will
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start
to raise the cost of the
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products
. To be more precise,

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People
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have to
pay lots for all the day-to-day household needs which burden their livelihood. To tackle this issue,
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people
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have to
support their
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local
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business
by using their
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products
that leads the
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local
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to
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flourish and
they will provide
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good
quality
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products
to the
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people
.

To sum up,
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local
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business
may
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reduce
the price tags of their
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products
which encourage the customers to attract to them.
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, the
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government
should
also
support the
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small
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scale
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industries
by providing tax breaks. Although,
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people
also
have a responsibility to support the
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small
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industries
by suggesting the
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products
to their friends and
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attracted towards the advertisements of large
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companies
.
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IELTS essay Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v. 1

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362 words
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