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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 1
Internet has become the necessity of our life. It has revolutionized the communication of modern era and has change the way to access information across the world. I agree with this statement to an extent and in this essay, I will highlight merits and demerits of it. On one hand, Internet has provided ease in one’s life from browsing an article to buying a house. Nowadays, one can simply search for an article and get the information in seconds. One does not need to wait or look through books to get the required data. With the advent of internet, access to information has become very easy without spending any effort to look for it. People can browse the required information in mere seconds. For instance, if a student wants to read an article for his homework, he can browse over the internet and can get the required information quickly. On the other hand, there are some downsides as well of this great invention. Firstly, it is really difficult to control the access to information and with such openness it can cause a negative impact on young generation especially kids. For example, kids could browse adult sites if parental controls are not in place. Secondly, it is not guaranteed to have authentic information over the internet. In order to browse anything, person needs to verify the source as there is quite a lot of fake information floating around. Finally, Internet has been used to propagate any agenda and to control minds of the people. Even political parties are using it as a tool to spread information which could easily provide them edge over their opponents. One example of such propaganda can be seen in the last presidential election of the US, where Trump was accused to influence people via social networks. In conclusion, Internet is considered as the greatest invention of this millennium but it has its own pitfalls from access control to spreading fake news. Therefore, I firmly believe that it can be an excellent tool if used in a proper way.
Internet has become the necessity of our life. It has revolutionized the communication of modern era and has
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change
the way to
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access
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information
across the world. I
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agree
with this statement to an extent and in this essay, I will highlight merits and demerits of it.

On one hand, Internet has provided
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ease
in one’s life from browsing an article to buying a
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house
. Nowadays, one can
simply
search for an article and
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get
the
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information
in seconds. One does not need to wait or look through books to
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get
the required data. With the advent of internet,
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access
to
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information
has become
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very
easy without spending any effort to look for it.
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People
can
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browse
the required
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information
in mere seconds.
For instance
, if a student wants to read an article for his homework, he can
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browse
over the internet and can
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get
the required
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information
quickly
.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
downsides
as well
of this great invention.
Firstly
, it is
really
difficult to
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control
the
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access
to
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information
and with such openness it can cause a
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negative
impact on young generation
especially
kids.
For example
, kids could
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browse
adult sites if parental
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controls
are not in place.
Secondly
, it is not guaranteed to have authentic
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information
over the internet. In order to
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browse
anything, person needs to verify the source as there is quite
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a lot of
fake
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information
floating around.
Finally
, Internet has been
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used
to propagate any agenda and to
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control
minds of the
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people
. Even political parties are using it as a tool to spread
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
which could
easily
provide them edge over their opponents. One example of such propaganda can be
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seen
in the last presidential election of the US, where Trump
was accused
to influence
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people
via social networks.

In conclusion
, Internet
is considered
as the greatest invention of this millennium
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but
it has its
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own
pitfalls from
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access
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control
to spreading fake news.
Therefore
, I
firmly
believe that it can be an excellent tool if
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used
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in a proper way
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The internet has greatly increased our access to information. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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