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The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v.1

The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 1
Some people ponder that the individuals who are earning high wages are making their country better while others think that the authorities should control the limit of amount that people are getting in the form of monthly salaries. In my opinion, I think that government should not limit the amount of remuneration of well-paid jobs for people who are getting high pay scale doing tough jobs. There are a plethora of reasons behind the individuals who are getting high salaries doing better jobs for the nation. To begin with, most of the people who are doing hard jobs must be eligible for earning a good amount such as an army colonel, pilots, scientists et cetera. Such people have different work profile that makes the country so proudly. The life of these people is suffering from danger because of their work category. For instance, there is a lot of difference between the work of a clerk and a defence personnel. Hence, there is a gap between their monthly pay scale. On the other side, others people believe that the country's administration should control the high wages. This is because they think that the salary difference might be create a wealth gap between the people. In other words, the disparity gap between rich and poor people will definitely rise. It will affect the economy in the form of social gap. Therefore, some people want the equal level of salaries for all To sum up, doubtless, salaries are decided as per the working conditions in an organization. Some people are in afraid of wealth gap due to difference in salaries, but in reality, people who are earning a high scale doing hard jobs since they deserve a better remuneration.
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ponder that the individuals
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who
are earning
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high
wages are making their country better while others
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think
that the authorities should control the limit of amount that
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people
are getting in the form of monthly
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salaries
. In my opinion, I
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think
that
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government
should not limit the amount of remuneration of well-paid
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jobs
for
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people
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who
are getting
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high
pay scale
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doing
tough jobs.

There are a plethora of reasons behind the individuals
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who
are getting
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high
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salaries
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doing
better
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jobs
for the nation. To
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begin
with, most of the
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people
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who
are
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doing
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hard
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jobs
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must
be eligible for earning a
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good
amount such as an army colonel, pilots,
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scientists et
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people
have
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different
work profile that
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makes
the country
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so
proudly
. The life of these
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people
is suffering from
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danger
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because
of their work category.
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, there is
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a lot of
difference between the work of a clerk and a
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defence
personnel.
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, there is a
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gap
between their monthly pay scale.

On the
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side, others
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people
believe that the country's administration should control the
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high
wages. This is
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they
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think
that the
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salary
difference might be
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create
a wealth
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gap
between the
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people
. In
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other
words, the disparity
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gap
between rich and poor
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people
will definitely rise. It will affect the economy in the form of social
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gap
.
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,
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some
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people
want the equal level of
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salaries
for all

To sum up, doubtless,
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salaries
are decided
as per the working conditions in an organization.
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people
are in afraid of wealth
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gap
due to difference in
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salaries
,
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in reality,
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people
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who
are earning a
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high
scale
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doing
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hard
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jobs
since they deserve a better remuneration.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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