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Are you studying What major What do you like and you dont like What do you want to change or improve v.1

Are you studying What major What do you like and you dont like What do you want to change or improve v. 1
Nowadays, it is difficult to enrol in a tertiary education institute for both lower class people and upper class people. In my opinion, I believe that to opt into university is extremely hard due to prerequisites, cost and course structure. A good reason for people to find an enrollment in university hectic is that the pre requirements they have. Firstly, every institute has certain requirements to get into the specific course, such as pre aptitude test and previous grades. Pre-screening tests are always tend to be troublesome for most of the students and, hence, they end up receiving unacceptable scores. Furthermore, some higher education institute have certain age or background requirements which cannot be fulfilled by most parents. Another obstacle that people face to access university is the finance they need to complete studies. Most university courses are expensive and have extra curriculum activities which they have to pay for and those are compulsory for the graduation. Sometimes pupils have to show certain funds that can assure the authorities they can afford expenses throughout the journey, especially if one is going for the overseas education. Finally, current education system is for profit purpose rather than providing quality education and, consequently, professors design course in a way that they do not adhere to one's requirement that they are looking to obtain during or after the completion of study. In conclusion, I think, because of tough requirements and management's mind set of increasing profit makes university inaccessible to everyone regardless of their background.
Nowadays, it is difficult to enrol in a tertiary
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institute for both lower
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class
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people
and upper
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class
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people
. In my opinion, I believe that to opt into
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university
is
extremely
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hard
due to prerequisites, cost and
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course
structure.

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good
reason for
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people
to find an enrollment in
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university
hectic is that the
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pre
requirements they have.
Firstly
, every institute has certain requirements to
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get
into the specific
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course
, such as
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pre
aptitude
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test
and previous grades.
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tests
are always
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to be troublesome for most of the students and,
hence
, they
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end
up receiving unacceptable scores.
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,
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higher
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education
institute have certain age or background requirements which cannot
be fulfilled
by most parents.

Another obstacle that
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people
face to access
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university
is the finance they need to complete studies. Most
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university
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courses
are expensive and have extra curriculum activities which they
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have to
pay for and those are compulsory for the graduation.
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Sometimes
pupils
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have to
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show
certain funds that can assure the authorities they can afford expenses throughout the journey,
especially
if one is going for the overseas education.

Finally
,
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current
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education
system is for profit purpose
rather
than providing quality
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education
and,
consequently
, professors design
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course
in a way that they do not adhere to one's
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requirement
that they are looking to obtain during or after the completion of study.

In conclusion
, I
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think
,
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because
of tough requirements and management's mind set of increasing profit
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makes
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university
inaccessible to everyone regardless of their background.
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IELTS essay Are you studying What major What do you like and you dont like What do you want to change or improve v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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