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Electric mobility devices like scooters rollers Segway and hoverboards are becoming very popular tools for commuting in cities Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development and give your own opinion v.1

Electric mobility devices like scooters rollers Segway and hoverboards are becoming very popular tools for commuting in cities Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development and give your own opinion v. 1
People have different opinions about happiness and the happiest times in their life. While many people believe they were very happy during their adolescence, others opine that adulthood was more enjoyable than their teenage years. In my opinion, the happiest times of life may vary from person to person. Each stage of life has its joys and sorrows. Many people remember their teenage years with utmost importance. There are several reasons for this. Most people would have enjoyed a great sense of freedom during their college days or school days. As friendship and brotherhood are in their prime during those years, many would have experienced joyful moments. For example, college parties and sports events were great occasions to get together and have great fun. Also, teenagers have much fewer responsibilities than adults. On the other hand, adulthood offers several positive and happy moments. Most of the adults fondly remember their cherished moments such as their first house or job, marriage day celebration, birth of their child and so on. As people age, they also evolve and develop qualities such as maturity and understanding. These factors can bring a sense of fulfillment and stability which in turn contributes to long term happiness in many people’s lives. In conclusion, adulthood and teenage life have their share of ups and downs. While it is the lack of responsibilities that make life joyous during adolescence, it is the realization of one’s dreams and aspirations that make adult life more memorable. In my opinion, it is up to each individual to say / decide which period was the happiest in their life.
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IELTS essay Electric mobility devices like scooters rollers Segway and hoverboards are becoming very popular tools for commuting in cities Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this development and give your own opinion v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
267 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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