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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

Nowadays online shopping has increasingly gaining more popularity and business because of which there is a fear built up of closing all the local shops in urban and country sides in the future. In this essay we will discuss why we complete disagree on this because there are many people who want to witness the product and certainly there might not be any such situation of closing these local shops. Online shopping has been a trend in the market from buying groceries till any high end gadgets. Internets shopping as become more and more famous because of two main reasons. Firstly there are all varieties of the product and millions of sellers waiting to sell this at reasonable price and with offers. Secondly, these products are delivered to you at your door steps with every mode of the status until it’s not shipped and received your signature. In recent survey from digital market, it has noticed a count of 75% people preferring to avail online service instead of visiting to the store. As a result of these reasons the fear of raising such orders might close the local stores is predicted. On the other hand, despite of having so many benefits provided by the online retailers there are many people who want to visit to the store and purchase the items because two main reasons. Firstly, many people want to trail and witness the product quality by themselves rather than going with others review in online. Secondly, they want to provide the jobs and allow the local store keepers whose family is running only on this whole and sole business. In recent survey conduct by reality shows, around 80% people have noticed going to store and purchasing any kind of dress because they have flexibility of trailing them and choosing the correct size. Some more people mentioned buying a television without seeing its clarity is not satisfied. Therefore considering these reasons we can clearly confirm that there would not be any such circumstance were the local store might have to get closed. To conclude this essay, we have discussed despite of seeing a huge growth in online shopping there are many people who want to witness the product and feel them from their eyes. Therefore we complete disagree with that growth of online shopping will kill the local stores.
Nowadays
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online
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shopping
has
increasingly
gaining more popularity and business
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because
of which there is a fear built up of closing all the
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local
shops in urban and country sides in the future. In this essay we will discuss why we complete disagree on this
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because
there are
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many
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people
who
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want
to witness the
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product
and
certainly
there might not be any such situation of closing these
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local
shops.

Online
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shopping
has been a trend in the market from buying groceries till any high
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end
gadgets. Internets
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shopping
as become more and more
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famous
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because
of two main
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reasons
.
Firstly
there are all varieties of the
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product
and millions of sellers waiting to sell this at reasonable price and with offers.
Secondly
, these
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products
are delivered
to you at your door steps with every mode of the status until it’s not shipped and received your signature. In recent survey from digital market, it has noticed a count of 75%
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people
preferring to avail
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online
service
instead
of visiting to the
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store
.
As a result
of these
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reasons
the fear of raising such orders might close the
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local
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stores
is predicted
.

On the other hand
, despite of having
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so
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many
benefits provided by the
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online
retailers there are
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many
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people
who
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want
to visit to the
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store
and
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purchase
the items
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because
two main
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reasons
.
Firstly
,
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many
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people
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want
to trail and witness the
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product
quality by themselves
rather
than going with others review in
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online
.
Secondly
, they
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want
to provide the jobs and
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allow
the
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local
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store
keepers whose family is running
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only
on this whole and sole business. In recent survey conduct by reality
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shows
, around 80%
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people
have noticed going to
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store
and purchasing any kind of dress
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because
they have flexibility of trailing them and choosing the correct size.
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Some
more
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people
mentioned buying a television without seeing its clarity is not satisfied.
Therefore
considering these
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reasons
we can
clearly
confirm that there would not be any such circumstance were the
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local
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store
might
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have to
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get
closed.

To conclude
this essay, we have discussed despite of seeing a huge growth in
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online
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shopping
there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
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want
to witness the
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product
and feel them from their eyes.
Therefore
we complete disagree with that growth of
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online
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shopping
will kill the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stores
.
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IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
389 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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