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Some people believe that the museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe that the museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. v. 1
People have argued about the entrance fee to museums and art galleries. Some people believe that it should be free of charged for the public, while others think that there should be an entrance fee. The following essay will explain these contradictory opinions in details, but in my point of view, I do believe that there should be levied for admittance. For a number of reasons, many people believe that the public should not be charged with any kind of fee when they enter museums or art galleries. Firstly, these sites have been funded by the government through taxes that were paid by residents. When museums and art galleries charge entrance fees, it means that people are paying double charges. Secondly, although these places contain historical and artistic artefacts but these places are not popular and attractive places. When these museums and galleries charge some fees, it is predicted that there will be fewer people who will visit these places. On the other hand, another group of people think that the public should be charged with either voluntary or admittance fees when they visit a museum or an art gallery. These people believe that by charging visitors with a certain amount of fees, it educates them to appreciate the value of history and arts. Besides that, these fees can be used to reduce subsidies that have been given by the government. The fund could be relocated by the government for other important matters such as education, public health or transportations. In conclusion, people often debate about the entrance fee of museums or art galleries. Several people think that there should not be any charges for visitors, while others disagree. I personally believe that there should proportionate charges for people when they enter the museum or an art gallery, as the fund could be used to cover the operational expense of these places, and reduce the subsidy from the government.
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these contradictory opinions in
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when they enter
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government
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art
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galleries
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, it means that
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, although these
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places
contain historical and artistic
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and
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some
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, it
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people
who will visit these places.

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hand, another group of
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people
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when they visit a
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art
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. These
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people
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that by charging visitors with a certain amount of
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, it educates them to appreciate the value of history and
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arts
.
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that, these
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reduce
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given
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government
. The fund could
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for
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other
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health or transportations.

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for visitors, while others disagree. I
personally
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that there should proportionate
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for
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people
when they enter the
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or an
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, as the fund could be
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used
to cover the operational expense of these
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places
, and
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reduce
the subsidy from the
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.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that the museums and historic sites should be open for free for children under 18. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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