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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.36

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 36
It is irrefutable that nowadays people are more inclined towards online shopping which might close down all shops in developed cities. I disagree with the given statement that shopping online will close down all shopping centres eventually. A number of arguments support my opinion. To begin with, it is important to verify and check costly things before buying it. This is because to buy vital things it is necessary to look for any damages, which usually in online shopping you do not know how your product will turn up until it is delivered. This leads to people going into shops and buy things which are important to them as they are spending a lot of money on it. For example, usually people do not buy gold online and tend to prefer going into a jewellery shop, so that they can check for the authenticity of the gold and get a guarantee card. Secondly, sometimes it becomes crucial for people to try out things before buying. To explain it further, usually youngsters love to wear and see if it suits them before they buy things. To illustrate, there are trial rooms in shopping malls where one can try out their favourite clothes and also look for fitting. This option is usually not provided by online shopping apps. Another example to explain is that overweight people would like to try out clothes of their size which will fit them properly. To sum up, although online shopping has been growing very fast, I disagree that this might lead to vanishing of shopping centres eventually as there is a need to authenticate and to try out things before buying it.
It is irrefutable that nowadays
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people
are more inclined towards
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online
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shopping
which might close down all shops in developed cities. I disagree with the
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given
statement that
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shopping
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online
will close down all
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shopping
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centres
eventually
. A number of arguments support my opinion.

To
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begin
with, it is
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important
to verify and
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check
costly things
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before
buying it. This is
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because
to
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buy
vital things it is necessary to look for any damages, which
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usually
in
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online
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shopping
you do not know how your product will turn up until it
is delivered
. This leads to
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people
going into shops and
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buy
things which are
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important
to them as they are spending
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a lot of
money on it.
For example
,
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usually
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people
do not
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buy
gold
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online
and tend to prefer going into a
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jewellery
shop,
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so
that they can
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check
for the authenticity of the gold and
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get
a guarantee card.

Secondly
,
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sometimes
it becomes crucial for
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people
to try out things
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before
buying. To
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explain
it
further
,
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usually
youngsters
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love
to wear and
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see
if it suits them
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before
they
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buy
things. To illustrate, there are trial rooms in
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shopping
malls where one can try out their
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favourite
clothes and
also
look for fitting. This option is
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usually
not provided by
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online
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shopping
apps. Another example to
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explain
is that overweight
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people
would like to try out clothes of their size which will fit them
properly
.

To sum up, although
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online
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shopping
has been growing
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very
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fast
, I disagree that this might lead to vanishing of
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shopping
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centres
eventually
as there is a need to authenticate and to try out things
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before
buying it.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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