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The Growth of online Shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.25

The Growth of online Shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 25
The suffusion of technology in everyday life is transforming human preferences; the most visible change is the shifting shopping patterns of individuals from conventional brick and mortar stores to online mediums. There is no doubt that the new trend is gaining popularity among the masses; especially in young generation. Several people deem that in the near future online shopping will supplant all other modes of shopping, resulting, in a worldwide closure of malls and shopping centres. As per my standpoint, the volume of the online trade will definitely increase many folds due to its convenience, but the notion of its complete capturing of the market transactions is preposterous. The primary reason that e-commerce cannot replace the local stores is the fact that these websites cannot provide physical verification of products before purchase. Evidently, a myriad of people still feels hesitant to buy goods, in particular expensive items, from online platforms. For instance, in many cases it has been observed that people do not get the same product as promised by the website, therefore, dwindle its credibility among customers. Furthermore, payment against online purchases are mostly made through debit, credit cards or other electronic methods, which are prone to cyber attacks from hackers. The danger of losing private information and financial loss is the prominent risk associated with the online purchases. In addition, criminals use different tactics to obtain personal information about customers such as creating fake websites on which huge discounts are offered to bait customers. For this reason, a plethora of people still prefer cash transactions and avoid online shopping as much as possible. Taking everything into account, there is no doubt that the scale of online shopping will increase over the course of time and it will open new vistas for business to promote their products. However, factors attached to online shopping such as unable to verify the products physically, counterfeit products are sold as original and potential risk of cybercrime impedes its complete dominance, henceforth, still make shopping centres, malls and stores an important place of attraction for customers.
The suffusion of technology in everyday life is transforming human preferences; the most visible
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change
is the shifting
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shopping
patterns of individuals from conventional brick and mortar stores to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
mediums. There is no doubt that the new trend is gaining popularity among the masses;
especially
in young generation. Several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
deem that in the near future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
will supplant all other modes of
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shopping
, resulting, in a worldwide closure of malls and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
. As per my standpoint, the volume of the
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online
trade will definitely increase
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many
folds due to its convenience,
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but
the notion of its complete capturing of the market transactions is preposterous.

The primary reason that e-commerce cannot replace the local stores is the fact that these websites cannot provide physical verification of
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products
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before
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purchase
.
Evidently
, a myriad of
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people
still
feels hesitant to
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buy
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goods
,
in particular
expensive items, from
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online
platforms.
For instance
, in
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many
cases it has
been observed
that
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people
do not
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get
the same
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product
as promised by the website,
therefore
, dwindle its credibility among customers.

Furthermore
, payment against
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online
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchases
are
mostly
made through debit, credit cards or other electronic methods, which are prone to
This word is normally spelled as one.
cyber attacks
from hackers. The
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danger
of losing private information and financial loss is the prominent
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risk
associated with the
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online
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purchases
.
In addition
, criminals
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use
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different
tactics to obtain personal information about customers such as creating fake websites on which huge discounts
are offered
to bait customers.
For this reason
, a plethora of
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people
still
prefer cash transactions and avoid
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
as much as possible.

Taking everything into account, there is no doubt that the scale of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
will increase over the course of time and it will open new vistas for business to promote their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
However
, factors attached to
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online
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shopping
such as unable to verify the
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products
physically
, counterfeit
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products
are sold
as original and potential
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risk
of cybercrime impedes its complete dominance, henceforth,
still
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make
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shopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
, malls and stores an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
place of attraction for customers.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The Growth of online Shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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