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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.9

Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 9
Nowadays a number of people think that the selection of students should be made according to their academic abilities, whereas another portion of people believe it is best if students with different abilities studies together. It can be agreed strongly upon the fact that this matter has some convincing arguments despite the contentions upon it. According to my opinion, it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. This essay will discuss both the views and thus will lead to a reasoned conclusion. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why selection should be made according to their academic abilities because some students are stronger in their academics and this can be a contributing factor towards future inventions or teachings by those brilliant minds. Moreover, their curriculums can be made according to their academic interests. For instance, research in this area invariably shows that schools who select their students with academic abilities often produce brilliant minds which later on make positive changes in people’s life. For this reason, the importance of academic abilities should not be ignored. Nevertheless, some people tend to believe that students studying with different abilities are better and can be addressed with some positive facts as well. However, the most predominant one stems from the fact that students with different abilities can learn from each other and they can become multi-talented, which is not only beneficial but also necessary. As an illustration, the findings of some studies reveal that famous celebrities or businessmen always have multi skills because they never bind themselves to single activities during their school times. Therefore, the importance of studying together is undeniable. After analysing the above discussion, it can be concluded that the impact of studying together is significant, although the negative effects of the same should not be overlooked. (299 words)
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academic
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abilities
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people
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students
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studies together. It can be
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agreed
strongly
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some
convincing arguments despite the contentions upon it.
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students
with
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different
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abilities
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studying
together. This essay will discuss both the views and
thus
will lead to a reasoned conclusion.

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be made
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according
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academic
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abilities
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because
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some
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students
are stronger in their
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academics
and this can be a contributing factor towards future inventions or teachings by those brilliant minds.
Moreover
, their curriculums can
be made
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according
to their
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academic
interests.
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shows
that schools who select their
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students
with
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academic
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abilities
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often
produce brilliant minds which later on
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make
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positive
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changes
in
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people’s
life.
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academic
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abilities
should not be
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ignored
.

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,
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some
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people
tend to believe that
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students
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studying
with
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different
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abilities
are better and can
be addressed
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some
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positive
facts
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, the most predominant one stems from the fact that
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students
with
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abilities
can learn from each
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other and
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beneficial
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necessary. As an illustration, the findings of
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some
studies reveal that
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famous celebrities
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skills
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because
they never bind themselves to single activities during their school times.
Therefore
, the importance of
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studying
together is undeniable.

After
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analysing
the above discussion, it can
be concluded
that the impact of
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studying
together is significant, although the
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negative
effects of the same should not
be overlooked
. (299 words)
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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