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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.17

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 17
It's often argued that, with the advent rising of the online purchases will lead's to the shutdown of the stores in the coming years. I completely disagree with this argument, many prefer to shop locally instead of buying online because they cannot feel or see the product in live. It's true that shopping online provide's us the various option's to buy conveniently without going anywhere from the place you are, but, it lacks in-terms of safety and reliability. We can be easily tricked in many forms. For example, one of my colleague wanted to buy a laptop online and browsed various websites to get it for a lesser price than the local market offers. Landed into a site which has a nice user interface and the main banner of the site says forty percent all over the products they sell. Felt something is fishy and purchased offline in the companies outlet. My friend was happy to buy offline as he got a nice discount as well as a gift to choose two accessories the brand offers. But buying from dealers or local shops is not always possible because they may lack in selling the new arrivals or products which are rarely bought. For example, last year I thought of purchasing shoes from a famous brand. But, that model is barely available in the market because of its low in production by the manufacturer. I have contacted many dealers and stores throughout the city and nowhere the footwear is available. Then, I started searching online and luckily found the shoes on their official site. I have spoken with the customer care to confirm the authenticity and purchased them with a lesser price tag compared to my budget. To conclude, Many believe purchasing product's from the local shops is always comfortable than buying online. Even though, the percentage may increase due to the ease and availability, It will not lead to the closing of all the stores either in cities or towns.
It's
often
argued that, with the advent rising of the
online
purchases
will
lead's
to the shutdown of the stores in the coming years. I completely disagree with this argument,
many
prefer to shop
locally
instead
of buying
online
because
they cannot feel or
see
the product in
live
.

It's true that shopping
online
provide's
us the various option's to
buy
conveniently
without going anywhere from the place you are,
but
, it lacks in-terms of safety and reliability. We can be
easily
tricked in
many
forms.
For example
, one of my colleague wanted to
buy
a laptop
online
and browsed various websites to
get
it for a lesser price than the local market offers. Landed into a site which has a nice user interface and the main banner of the site says forty percent all over the products they sell. Felt something is fishy and
purchased
offline in the
companies
outlet. My friend was happy to
buy
offline as he
got
a nice discount
as well
as a gift to choose two accessories the brand offers.

But
buying from dealers or local shops is not always possible
because
they may lack in selling the new arrivals or products which are rarely
bought
.
For example
, last year I
thought
of purchasing shoes from a
famous
brand.
But
, that model is
barely
available in the market
because
of its low in production by the manufacturer. I have contacted
many
dealers and stores throughout the city and nowhere the footwear is available. Then, I
started
searching
online
and luckily found the shoes on their official site. I have spoken with the customer care to confirm the authenticity and
purchased
them with a lesser price tag compared to my budget.

To conclude
,
Many
believe purchasing product's from the local shops is always
comfortable
than buying
online
.
Even though
, the percentage may increase due to the
ease
and availability, It will not lead to the closing of all the stores either in cities or towns.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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