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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach? v.3

In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach? v. 3
As we move into the twenty-first century and with the advancement in technology, all of aspects of life are influenced by this case and education is no exception. Indeed, in some educational centres, traditional form of training have been revolutionized by new technology to some extent that the lecture is no longer the main method of education. While there are a variety of merits of a new approach, I personally believe the drawbacks are far more. On the one hand, many commentators justifiably argue that there are advantages to training students through new technology. Firstly, it is now no longer essential for students to be present in the lecture theatre for their courses. Indeed, this form of courses is ideal for people who devote virtually their whole time to work and they can benefit from a flexible class schedule. In addition, the distance learning course is suitable and practical for people across the world who find it difficult to take part in this course. Another using of technology in education is that through training mobile application, tutor and students are able to interact with each other while they are in their location and study at their own pace. On the other hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that the new approach has had several drawbacks. They argue that traditional method provides a great opportunity for students that want to have a face-to–face interaction with students and their professor. Moreover, all students are not comfortable with using technology, even if they are part of the digital native generation. Indeed, they may suffer from their lack of technological skills or they do not have easy access to technology tools. Furthermore, participating in classrooms gives students a sense of unity and encouragement. In my personal opinion, although teaching students through technological method might have some advantages, the disadvantages are more prominent.
As we
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century and with the advancement in
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technology
,
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all of aspects
of life
are influenced
by this case and education is no exception.
Indeed
, in
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some
educational
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centres
, traditional form of training have
been revolutionized
by
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new
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technology
to
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some
extent that the lecture is no longer the main method of education. While there are a variety of merits of a
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new
approach, I
personally
believe the drawbacks are far more.

On the one hand,
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many
commentators
justifiably
argue that there are advantages to training
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students
through
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new
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technology
.
Firstly
, it is
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now
no longer essential for
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students
to be present in the lecture
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theatre
for their
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courses
.
Indeed
, this form of
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courses
is ideal for
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people
who devote
virtually
their whole time to
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work and
they can benefit from a flexible
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class
schedule.
In addition
, the distance learning
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course
is suitable and practical for
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people
across the world who find it difficult to
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take part
in this
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course
. Another using of
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technology
in education is that through training mobile application, tutor and
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students
are able to interact with each other while they are in their location and study at their
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own
pace.

On the other hand
, there are those who subscribe to the view that the
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new
approach has had several drawbacks. They argue that traditional method provides a great opportunity for
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students
that want to have a face-to–face interaction with
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students
and their professor.
Moreover
, all
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students
are not
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comfortable with using
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technology
, even if they are part of the digital native generation.
Indeed
, they may suffer from their lack of technological
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skills or
they do not have easy access to
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technology
tools.
Furthermore
, participating in classrooms gives
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students
a sense of unity and encouragement.

In my personal opinion, although teaching
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students
through technological method might have
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some
advantages, the disadvantages are more prominent.
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IELTS essay In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach? v. 3

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  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
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