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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree? v.15

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 15
With advancement in technology, online stores are gaining popularity among the masses. A growing number of people are making their purchases using these e-commerce websites rather than visiting the stores. It is widely believed that this trend shall force many retail outlets to shut down in the future. I share the same opinion as them. This essay shall cover reasons as to why we might not be seeing any shops in times to come. The fierce competition and struggle to meet ends makes it difficult to take out time to go visit a store. Also, with the rapid growth in world population the issue of congestion has surfaced which increases the duration of reaching the place and locating a parking spot. Buying stuff through the internet saves time and hustle of visiting the shop. To elaborate this point let’s take an example, if one has to select a pair of Zara Jeans, you just go to the Zara online store, scroll down, select and make the payment. It takes only five minutes and a few clicks of the mouse! Moreover, the internet is progressing each day, e-commerce companies are trying to bring all consumer needs and wants on the same place. For example, websites like Alibaba allow you to buy clothes, tyres, tools, crockery, etc everything at the same place. On the contrary, making choices in the traditional manner means you go to each and every shop and then spend some more time and energy in making choices. In conclusion, data in a number of countries show the adoption rate of this behaviour is very high. For instance, in Pakistan traffic on such websites have grown three folds in the past couple of years. I strongly agree that soon retail outlets shall not be seen anymore.
With advancement in technology, online
stores
are gaining popularity among the masses. A growing number of
people
are making their
purchases
using these e-commerce websites
rather
than visiting the
stores
. It is
widely
believed that this trend shall force
many
retail outlets to shut down in the future. I share the same opinion as them. This essay shall cover reasons as to why we might not be seeing any shops in
times
to
come
.

The fierce competition and struggle to
meet
ends
makes
it difficult to take out
time
to go visit a
store
.
Also
, with the rapid growth in world population the issue of congestion has surfaced which increases the duration of reaching the place and locating a parking spot. Buying stuff through the internet saves
time
and hustle of visiting the shop. To elaborate this point
let
’s take an example, if one
has to
select a pair of Zara Jeans, you
just
go to the Zara online
store
, scroll down, select and
make
the payment. It takes
only
five minutes and a few clicks of the mouse!

Moreover
, the internet is progressing each day, e-commerce
companies
are trying to bring all consumer needs and wants on the same place.
For example
, websites like Alibaba
allow
you to
buy
clothes,
tyres
, tools, crockery, etc everything at the same place.
On the contrary
, making choices in the traditional manner means you go to each and every shop and then spend
some
more
time
and energy in making choices.

In conclusion
, data in a number of countries
show
the adoption rate of this
behaviour
is
very
high.
For instance
, in Pakistan traffic on such websites have grown three folds in the past couple of years. I
strongly
agree
that
soon
retail outlets shall not be
seen
anymore.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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