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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? v.10

In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? v. 10
The rate of crime in many countries is increasing tremendously. Most of these countries are developing nations. This essay will discuss the causes of growing crime, including fighting for power and negative influence of the surroundings. This essay will also focus on the solutions to deal with these causes which includes proactive government, awareness and educational programs. Crime in youth is growing at an abnormal rate. This is mainly because of the negative influence of the society which consists of parents, teachers and children of their own age. In addition to this, battling for power, not only between countries but also humans have accelerated. Power in the form of money and position has encouraged the crime rate. For example, War conditions between India and Pakistan have increased the illegal acts in both the countries. Also, amongst the young generation bullying has risen. This leads to expressing feelings in a negative way. Hence, the number of juvenile crimes is escalated. The solution to these problems is to make government policies impactful. Harsh rules will reduce the percentage of crimes. For instance, introduction of Anti-ragging schemes in schools and colleges will lower the negative impact on youth. Unless and until the awareness programs by the various communities for parents, teacher and students are not conducted, the crime proportion will not discourage. To summarize, many countries are facing problems of accelerated crime rate. This essay discussed the causes which boosted the illegal acts. Causes like hunger for power and adverse impact of the surroundings have lifted the scale of crime. This essay also focused on solutions like tightening of legislative rules and regulations and generating awareness, especially between young generation, so that the rate of offences will slow down.
The
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countries
is increasing
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countries
are developing nations. This
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essay
will discuss the
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causes
of growing
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crime
, including fighting for
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power
and
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negative
influence of the surroundings. This
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essay
will
also
focus on the solutions to deal with these
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causes
which includes proactive
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government
, awareness and educational programs.

Crime in youth is growing at an abnormal
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rate
. This is
mainly
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because
of the
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negative
influence of the society which consists of parents, teachers and children of their
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own
age.
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to this, battling for
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power
, not
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between
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countries
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but
also
humans have accelerated.
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Power
in the form of money and position has encouraged the
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crime
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rate
.
For example
, War conditions between India and Pakistan have increased the illegal acts in both the
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countries
.
Also
, amongst the young generation bullying has risen. This leads to expressing feelings in a
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negative
way.
Hence
, the number of juvenile
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crimes
is escalated
.

The solution to these problems is to
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make
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government
policies impactful. Harsh
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rules
will
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reduce
the percentage of
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crimes
.
For instance
, introduction of Anti-ragging schemes in schools and colleges will lower the
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negative
impact on youth. Unless and until the awareness programs by the various communities for parents, teacher and students are not conducted, the
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crime
proportion will not discourage.

To summarize
,
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many
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countries
are facing problems of accelerated
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crime
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rate
. This
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essay
discussed the
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causes
which boosted the illegal acts.
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Causes
like hunger for
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power
and adverse impact of the surroundings have lifted the scale of
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crime
. This
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essay
also
focused on solutions like tightening of legislative
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rules
and regulations and generating awareness,
especially
between young generation,
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that the
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rate
of
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offences
will slow down.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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