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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for the tourist who visit such places? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. v.26

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for the tourist who visit such places? v. 26
Why many individual or group of people love to travel despite of other obstacles? Because travelling is a major mind relaxation hobby which cover many minor related hobbies. This may be attracting tourist toward Sahara Desert, Antarctic or K2. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of such type trips, followed by a conclusion. Accepting challenges is the nature of human. Travelling to those areas where it seems to be impossible is significantly challenging for human. Among the advantages of tourism is to give confidence to oneself and achieve mental satisfaction. Also, it is important for learning new experiences in life. I have never experienced a night camping in desert areas in my life, but once I practically did last year with a group of friends, it was an awesome learning for me. Number of travelers love to do a more challenging task or to do sometime make them famous which no one or a few people done in their lives. For examples climbing K2, the world second highest mountain or visiting the area like the Antarctic. On the other hand, we saw many news that most of the time the actual things went wrong against what they planned for the trip, like injuries or deaths due snow-slide. Missing visitors during travelling tribal areas is high risk for international tripper and considered as a biggest disadvantage. Further, travelling to desert area is a real-life threat because there of poisoned insect and snakes are very common especially in nighttime. Moreover, rubbers everyday business to looking visitor and take their stuff by different way. In conclusion, transit is really a crucial job from all aspects, particularly desert or coldest areas of the world, but who adventure lover do not care of these matters, and they always keep moving for their achievements.
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individual or group of
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people
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love
to travel
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despite of
other obstacles?
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Because
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travelling
is a major mind relaxation hobby which cover
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many
minor related hobbies. This may be attracting tourist toward Sahara
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Desert
, Antarctic or K2. This essay will discuss the pros and cons of such type trips, followed by a conclusion.

Accepting challenges is the nature of human.
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Travelling
to those
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areas
where it seems to be impossible is
significantly
challenging for human. Among the advantages of tourism is to give confidence to oneself and achieve mental satisfaction.
Also
, it is
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important
for learning new experiences in life. I have never experienced a night camping in
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desert
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areas
in my life,
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but
once I
practically
did last year with a group of friends, it was an awesome learning for me. Number of travelers
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love
to do a more challenging task or to do sometime
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make
them
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famous
which no one or a few
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people
done in their
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lives
. For examples climbing K2, the world second highest mountain or visiting the
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area
like the Antarctic.

On the other hand
, we
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saw
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many news
that most of the time the actual things went
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wrong
against what they planned for the trip, like injuries or deaths due snow-slide. Missing visitors during
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travelling
tribal
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areas
is high
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risk
for international tripper and considered as
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a
biggest disadvantage.
Further
,
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travelling
to
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desert
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area
is a real-life threat
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because
there of poisoned insect and snakes are
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very
common
especially
in nighttime.
Moreover
, rubbers everyday business to looking visitor and take their stuff by
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different
way.

In conclusion
, transit is
really
a crucial job from all aspects,
particularly
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desert
or coldest
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areas
of the world,
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but
who adventure lover do not care of these matters, and they always
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keep
moving for their achievements.
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IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for the tourist who visit such places? v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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