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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries v.2

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries v. 2
The following chart demonstrates differences in the population rate among elderly people from 65 and over since 1940 and there is also given a predictable rise until 2040 in the USA, Sweden and Japan. It is clear from the graph that the number of old aged people in all three countries is expected to have an upward trend. Now turning to the details, first 20 years saw a gradual rise in the amount of elderly people in the USA and Sweden as opposed to a gradual decrease by almost 2% in Japan. According to the graph, we can see that there was a significant increase of old aged people by just over 5% in the USA and Sweden between 1960 and 1980, while the percentage of old Japaneses stayed constant and remained at 3%. Before a steady growth at 14%, almost until 2018, the proportion of American elderly people decreased slightly by 2% in 1995. The old aged population rate in Japan, in contrast rose by 2% in 2000, by reaching the same level as in 1940. It is interesting that since 2000 the amount of old people in Japan has increased moderately and 2030 is predicted to see a dramatic growth and will peak at 25%. Next 20 years in the USA are expected to see a gradual rise in scale of old people, which will reach almost 23%, while before a gradual growth in 2025, the old people scale in Sweden will decrease slightly by approximately 5%. Overall, in the future is predicted that a longevity among elderly people will increase in the USA, Sweden and Japan.
The following chart demonstrates differences in the population rate among
elderly
people
from 65 and over since 1940 and there is
also
given
a predictable rise until 2040 in the USA, Sweden and Japan.

It is
clear
from the graph that the number of
old
aged
people
in all three countries is
expected
to have an upward trend.

Now
turning to the
details
,
first
20 years
saw
a
gradual
rise in the amount of
elderly
people
in the USA and Sweden as opposed to a
gradual
decrease by almost 2% in Japan.

According to the graph, we can
see
that there was a significant increase of
old
aged
people
by
just
over 5% in the USA and Sweden between 1960 and 1980, while the percentage of
old
Japaneses stayed constant and remained at 3%.

Before
a steady growth at 14%, almost until 2018, the proportion of American
elderly
people
decreased
slightly
by 2% in 1995. The
old
aged population rate in Japan,
in contrast
rose by 2% in 2000, by reaching the same level as in 1940.

It is interesting that since 2000 the amount of
old
people
in Japan has increased
moderately
and 2030
is predicted
to
see
a dramatic growth and will peak at 25%.

Next
20 years in the USA are
expected
to
see
a
gradual
rise in scale of
old
people
, which will reach almost 23%, while
before
a
gradual
growth in 2025, the
old
people
scale in Sweden will decrease
slightly
by approximately 5%.

Overall
, in the future
is predicted
that a longevity among
elderly
people
will increase in the USA, Sweden and Japan.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries v. 2

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
269 words
6
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