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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison were relevant. v.11

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The present line graph narrate the number of people who have a equal or greater than 65 age live in three different countries between 1940 to present time and also indicate how this percentages change in future till 2040. Overall, it lucid that the population of overage people upsurge over a period. Moreover, this rate gradually increase in future. Now, turning to the details in 1940 all nations has low population rate who are overage which was 5% in japan, 7% in swedan, 5% in usa. between 1940 to 1980 this number slowly decrease in usa and swedan on other hand this rate rapidly climb in japan. At 1980 to present time this amount is high in current time as compared to 4 decades ago. After a few years this percentages slowly increase but when line graph reach at 2030 this percentages upsurge with skyrocket for one decades and peak with over a one quarter percentages in swedan and japan and 22% in swedan.
The present line graph narrate the number of
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people
who have
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a
equal or greater than 65 age
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live
in three
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different
countries between 1940 to present time and
also
indicate how this
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percentages
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change
in future till 2040.

Overall
,
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it
lucid that the population of overage
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people
upsurge over a period.
Moreover
, this rate
gradually
increase
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in future
.

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Now
, turning to the
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details
in 1940 all nations has low population rate who are overage which was 5% in japan, 7% in
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swedan
, 5% in
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usa
.
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between 1940 to 1980
this number
slowly
decrease in
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usa
and
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swedan
on other hand this rate
rapidly
climb in japan. At 1980 to present time this amount is high in
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current
time as compared to 4 decades ago. After a few years
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this
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percentages
slowly
increase
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but
when line graph reach at 2030 this
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percentages
upsurge with skyrocket for
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one decades
and peak with over a one quarter
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percentages
in
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swedan
and japan and 22% in
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swedan
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
164 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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