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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.21

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent with this opinion? v. 21
In the recent century, the number of people have a health issue increase in any country. Because they overeat junk food, some people believe the government should get higher tax on fast food. This essay will discuss above topic. However, the higher-tax is not seems a good form to solve that. Evidence suggests, today, people don’t have enough time to cook or prepare some sample food. So they prefer to eat fast food. Because it is prepare soon. Most people don’t attention to price. So if the government to improve a higher- tax, that trouble is not solved. To illustrate this, increasing cost isn’t a good way to decrease the use of unhealthy food. On the other hand, organic food or health foods are more expensive. Some people don’t afford to buy healthy meal. The government should lower the price of organic meat. Despite this, educating is an important style in every problem. The ministry should spend more money to teach children, how they care of their body and what is a healthy meal? If families know about the drawbacks of junk food, they don’t eat them. The second way to solve that problem is corporate consider sometimes for employees eat health food. For example, encourage employees to eat health food. Summery, considering that point discuss above, the government should attend to the health of people. Fast food can endure to the body and higher the tax on that food isn’t a good style for people decrease to eat them.
In the recent century, the number of
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people
have a
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health
issue increase in any country.
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Because
they overeat junk
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food
,
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some
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people
believe the
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government
should
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get
higher tax on
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fast
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food
. This essay will discuss above topic.
However
, the higher-tax is not seems a
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good
form to solve that.

Evidence suggests,
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today
,
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people
don’t have
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enough
time to cook or prepare
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some
sample
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food
.
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So
they prefer to
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eat
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fast
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food
.
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Because
it is
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prepare
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soon
. Most
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people
don’t attention to price.
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So
if the
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government
to
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improve
a higher- tax, that trouble is not solved. To illustrate this, increasing cost isn’t a
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good
way to decrease the
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use
of unhealthy food.

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, organic
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food
or
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health
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foods
are more expensive.
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Some
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people
don’t afford to
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buy
healthy meal. The
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government
should lower the price of organic meat. Despite this, educating is an
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important
style in every problem. The ministry should spend more money to teach children, how they care of their body and what is a healthy meal? If families know about the drawbacks of junk
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food
, they don’t
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eat
them. The second way to solve that problem is corporate consider
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sometimes
for employees
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eat
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health
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food
.
For example
, encourage employees to
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eat
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health
food.

Summery, considering that point discuss above, the
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government
should attend to the
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health
of
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people
.
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Fast
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food
can endure to the body and higher the tax on that
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food
isn’t a
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good
style for
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people
decrease to
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eat
them.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To wht extent with this opinion? v. 21

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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