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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v.1

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 1
The line graph depicts the percentage of older residents who are part of the USA, SWEDEN and JAPAN countries from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it is clearly vivid from the graph that the United States of America and Sweden trends has gone through fluctuation as compared to the Japan. Japan whose population was less in the past years compared to the other countries, but it will beat them in the future, keeping the Sweden on second rank and United States on third. In 1940, only 9% community of senior citizen in America and every two decades the public of elderly people was increasing till 1980 which reached up to a less than a fifth of the total population, but after 1980 it was going down by one percent till 1990 and from 1990 it is constant till 2020 and after 2020 there will be slightly less than a quarter elder citizens in the USA. Likewise USA, Sweden has similar trend till the year 1980 but from the year 1990, the Sweden older folks were increased till 2010 up to 20 percentages, but after 2020 it is going down, although Sweden will have a quarterly number of citizens whose age is 65 or above. Unlike Sweden and USA, Japan had only five percentage of oldies in 1940, even after 1940 its elderly people went down in 1960 by 1%, but from 1960 to 1990 the elder's community remained stable till 1990, but after the year 1990 the Japans senior age inhabitants are rising every cycle and in 2040, the Japan will have more than 25 proportion of senior citizens compared to the USA and SWEDEN.
The line graph depicts the percentage of older residents who are part of the USA, SWEDEN and
JAPAN
countries from 1940 to 2040.

Overall
, it is
clearly
vivid from the graph that the United States of America and Sweden trends has gone through fluctuation as compared to the
Japan
.
Japan
whose population was less in the past years compared to the other countries,
but
it will beat them in the future, keeping the Sweden on second rank and United States on third.

In 1940,
only
9% community of senior
citizen
in America and every two decades the public of elderly
people
was increasing till 1980 which reached up to a less than a fifth of the total population,
but
after 1980 it was going down by one percent till 1990 and from 1990 it is constant till 2020 and after 2020 there will be
slightly
less than a quarter elder
citizens
in the USA.
Likewise
USA, Sweden has similar trend till the
year
1980
but
from the
year
1990, the Sweden older folks
were increased
till 2010 up to 20 percentages,
but
after 2020 it is going down, although Sweden will have a quarterly number of
citizens
whose age is 65 or above.

Unlike Sweden and USA,
Japan
had
only
five percentage of oldies in 1940, even after 1940 its elderly
people
went down in 1960 by 1%,
but
from 1960 to 1990 the elder's community remained stable till 1990,
but
after the
year
1990 the
Japans
senior age inhabitants are rising every cycle and in 2040, the
Japan
will have more than 25 proportion of senior
citizens
compared to the USA and SWEDEN.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
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