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Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time because it has no direct connection with people s lives To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time because it has no direct connection with people s lives v. 2
In recent period reading newspapers and watching television news has been common activities in modern human' s life. But there is contention significantly, some people' s are agreed with this statement; whereas, other have the conflicting views. Here in the below essay I will try to enunciate this fact with my own perception. As far as I am concerned that reading newspapers and watching TV is not wasting of time rather it has much better benefits for people' s everyday life. For example: People' s can learn such as good things from newspaper, like as how to stay in healthy life, how to use modern technology, how to love or treat each other, how to fight against the evil. In other hand by watching TV news we can acknowledge all around the world condition easily, able to serve fantastic tips about the relation with each others. Even though there is some disadvantages like, sometime newspaper has been published fake news or some time short of valueless article with meaningless word. Moreover, some TV channel also broadcasting unhelpful news or sometime there is political issues they telecast which is wrong unexpectedly. However, there is still advantage. In addition, there is some more direct connection with people' s daily lives by reading newspaper and watching TV news. Firstly, living as a member of competition planet we must need to be updated to compete with each other, otherwise, it' s gonna be hard to get a good opportunity. For example: Developing country people' s are not that much reader than developed country, as a result they can' t compete with them in internationally. Secondly, people' s are always been the reason for environment pollution, just as air, water and other related contamination. Human' s also cause' s for deforestation. So television has been given the advantage by broadcasting news about the awareness of pollution, though People' s can be aware by watching TV. Thirdly, loneliness has been getting peak problem in modern human' s life markedly, so reading newspapers or watching television can be reduce the problem. To recapitulate, reading newspaper' s and watching TV news habit might be great advantage for people' s life. So everybody should grab this benefit and start to make habit in everyday life' s.
In recent period
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reading
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newspapers
and watching television
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news
has been common activities in modern
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life
.
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But
there is contention
significantly
,
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some
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people&
#039; s are
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agreed
with this statement; whereas,
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other
have the conflicting views. Here in the below essay I will try to enunciate this fact with my
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own
perception.

As far as I
am concerned
that
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reading
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newspapers
and watching TV is not wasting of time
rather
it has much better benefits for
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people&
#039; s everyday
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life
.
For example
:
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People&
#039; s can learn such as
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good
things from
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newspaper
, like as how to stay in healthy
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life
, how to
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use
modern technology, how to
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love
or treat each
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other
, how to fight against the evil. In
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other
hand by watching TV
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news
we can acknowledge all around the world condition
easily
, able to serve fantastic tips about the relation with each
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "other"?
others
.
Even though
there is
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some
disadvantages like, sometime
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newspaper
has
been published
fake
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news
or
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some
time short of valueless article with meaningless word.
Moreover
,
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some
Did you mean "(TV)"?
TV
channel
also
broadcasting unhelpful
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news
or sometime
Did you mean "there are political issues"?
there is political issues
they telecast which is
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wrong
unexpectedly
.
However
, there is
still
advantage.

In addition
, there is
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some
more direct connection with
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people&
#039; s daily
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lives
by
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reading
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newspaper
and watching TV
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news
.
Firstly
, living as a member of competition planet we
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must
need to
be updated
to compete with each
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other
,
otherwise
,
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it&
#039; s
The word 'gonna' is informal. Consider an alternative.
gonna
be
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hard
to
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get
a
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good
opportunity.
For example
:
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Developing country
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people&
#039; s are not that much reader than
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developed country
,
as a result
they
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can&
#039; t compete with them in
internationally
.
Secondly
,
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people&
#039; s are always been the reason for environment pollution,
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just
as air, water and
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other
related contamination.
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Human&
#039; s
also
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cause&
#039; s for deforestation.
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So
television has been
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given
the advantage by broadcasting
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news
about the awareness of pollution, though
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People&
#039; s can be aware by watching TV.
Thirdly
, loneliness has been getting peak problem in modern
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human&
#039; s
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life
markedly
,
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so
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reading
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
newspapers
or watching television can be
Consider using the past participle "reduced"?
reduce
the problem.

To recapitulate,
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reading
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newspaper&
#039; s and watching TV
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news
habit might be great advantage for
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people&
#039; s
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life
.
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So
everybody should grab this benefit and
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start
to
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make
habit in
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everyday
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life&
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15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS essay Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time because it has no direct connection with people s lives v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
377 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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