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The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by day car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. v.2

The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by day car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. v. 2
The line chart compares the figure of daily passengers who travel by three different forms of transport in the UK from 1970 to 2030. Overall, the UK commuters prefer using the car to going by bus and train, and bus passengers tend to decrease in 60 years. Between 1970 and 2015, there was a dramatic increase in the number of car commuters from around 5 to 7 million. In this time, although the figure of bus users was nearly double the number of train passengers which was around 2 million (1970), the figure of bus users reduced slowly to the same number of train commuters which was 3. 5 million (2015). In 2030, car users are expected to grow continuously to reach a peak of 9 million. While the number of train passengers is predicted to climb quickly to just below 5 million (2030), it is anticipated that the figure of the bus commuters will decrease slightly to the number which is less than three times the number of car users (2030).
The line chart compares the
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passengers
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different
forms of transport in the UK from 1970 to 2030.

Overall
, the UK
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commuters
prefer using the
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car
to going by bus and
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train
, and bus
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passengers
tend to decrease in 60 years.

Between 1970 and 2015, there was a dramatic increase in the
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number
of
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car
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commuters
from around 5 to 7
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million
. In this time, although the
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figure
of bus
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users
was
nearly
double the
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number
of
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train
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passengers
which was around 2
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million
(1970), the
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figure
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users
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reduced
slowly
to the same
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number
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train
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commuters
which was 3. 5
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million
(2015).

In 2030,
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car
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users
are
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expected
to grow
continuously
to reach a peak of 9
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million
. While the
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number
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train
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passengers
is predicted
to climb
quickly
to
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just
below 5
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million
(2030), it
is anticipated
that the
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figure
of the bus
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commuters
will decrease
slightly
to the
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number
which is less than three times the
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car
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by day car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
172 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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