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Some people think it s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them Other people believe it s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them Discuss both views and give your opinion v.4

Some people think it s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them Other people believe it s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them 4
Since we are human and now living in a society that emphasizes connectivity. We all need various relationships such as families, colleagues, and friends. Especially, we always have our criteria when making friends. Some people argue that friends are must regularly have a common perspective as them. However, others suppose friendship should be built up by people with several distinct standpoints. To erase distances, friends should indeed have equal characters or behaviors alike. Therefore, they able to share their hobbies, their points of view and shorten their gaps. Thus, they could easily understand each other. For instant, if you and your friends support a similar football team, you will feel more interested to discuss with them about the team’s issues or the rivals of the team in a comfortable manner. On the other hand, identical angles are not always compulsory showed by our friends. Every person has their private sides and choices. Nonetheless, it does not mean they could not be friends together. Occasionally, if they have unlikely observations, they could help to discover an effective way to solve problems and learn from each other to improve their skills or supply their knowledge at the same time. In parallel, a true friendship is not only sharing the same values but also creating a new emotion base on differences and comprehension. In conclusion, I somewhat agree that we should have a few differences to lift and help in our complementary roles. Besides that, to enhance a stable friendship, we also need to choose someone who has a resemblance to us.
Since we are human and
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now
living in a society that emphasizes connectivity. We all need various relationships such as families, colleagues, and
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friends
.
Especially
, we always have our criteria when making
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friends
.
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people
argue that
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friends
are
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must
regularly
have a common perspective as them.
However
, others suppose friendship should
be built
up by
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people
with several distinct standpoints.

To erase distances,
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friends
should
indeed
have equal characters or behaviors alike.
Therefore
,
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they
able to share their hobbies, their points of view and shorten their gaps.
Thus
, they could
easily
understand each
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other
. For instant, if you and your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
support a similar football team, you will feel more interested to discuss with them about the team’s issues or the rivals of the team
Consider replacing "in a comfortable manner" with the adverb for "comfortable"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a comfortable manner
.

On the
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other
hand, identical angles are not always compulsory
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showed
by our
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friends
. Every person has
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their
private sides and choices. Nonetheless, it does not mean they could not be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
together.
Occasionally
, if they have unlikely observations, they could
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help
to discover an effective way to solve problems and learn from each
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other
to
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improve
their
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skills
or supply their knowledge at the same time. In parallel, a true friendship is not
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only
sharing the same values
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but
also
creating a new emotion base on differences and comprehension.

In conclusion
, I somewhat
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agree
that we should have a few differences to lift and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in our complementary roles.
Besides
that, to enhance a stable friendship, we
also
need to choose someone who has a resemblance to us.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them Other people believe it s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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