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The Graph and Table bellow give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries from 1900 to 2000 v.1

The Graph and Table bellow give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries from 1900 to 2000 v. 1
The neighbourhood is one of the issues that families have different idea about it. Nowadays, most of individuals have less relationship with their neighbours. Although there are specific social concern, effective attention should be paid to solve them. There are two main reasons why people have less connection with their neighbours. Firstly, mechanical lifestyle have been caused to the public people spent most of the their time outside of home for the sake of preparing necessities for their life. In the other words, when they come back home, they have exhausted their energy as if they just can spend the rest time of the day for relaxing and getting energy. Take a working at weekends as an example; because of knowing neighbour weekend holidays are a rewarding time, but when people have to be at the second career, there is no extra time not only in the neighbourhood, but just a little for family. Secondly, the public individuals prefer to know their neighbours that have the same culture. But, nowadays, travelling caused to the neighbours be from various arrays of cultures, especially in the big cities. There ARE, however, some workable solutions to encourage people to talk more with their neighbours, One step would be managers of apartments enhance facilities such as celebrities and holiday event in the buildings in order to urge neighbours to not only take part in feasts, but also take a rest and have a nice conversation with their neighbours. Another viable alternative is that people try to take in some information about their neighbours culture, which can be helpful to know better each other. To conclude, less connection with neighbours may happen because of many reasons, including busy lifestyle and different culture, In spite of all these factors, the rewarding solution would be holding ceremonies in the buildings followed by studying about their neighbours cultures.
The
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neighbourhood
is one of the issues that families have
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different
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idea
about it. Nowadays,
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most of individuals
have less relationship with their
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neighbours
. Although there are specific social concern, effective attention should
be paid
to solve them.

There are two main reasons why
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people
have less connection with their
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neighbours
.
Firstly
, mechanical lifestyle have
been caused
to the public
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people
spent most of the their
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time
outside of home for the sake of preparing necessities for their life. In the other words, when they
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come
back home, they have exhausted their energy as if they
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just
can spend the rest
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time
of the day for relaxing and getting energy. Take a working at weekends as an example;
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because
of knowing
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neighbour
weekend holidays are a rewarding
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time
,
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but
when
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people
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have to
be at the second career, there is no extra
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time
not
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only
in the
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neighbourhood
,
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but
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just
a
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little
for family.
Secondly
, the public individuals prefer to know their
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neighbours
that have the same
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culture
.
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But
, nowadays, travelling caused to the
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neighbours
be from various arrays of
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cultures
,
especially
in the
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big
cities.

There ARE,
however
,
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some
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workable
solutions to encourage
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people
to talk more with their
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neighbours
, One step would be managers of apartments enhance facilities such as celebrities and holiday
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event
in the buildings in order to urge
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neighbours
to not
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only
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take part
in feasts,
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but
also
take a rest and have a nice conversation with their
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neighbours
. Another viable alternative is that
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people
try to take in
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some
information about their
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neighbours
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culture
, which can be helpful to know better each other.

To conclude
, less connection with
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neighbours
may happen
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because
of
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many
reasons, including busy lifestyle and
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different
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culture
,
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In spite of
all these factors, the rewarding solution would be holding ceremonies in the buildings followed by studying about their
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neighbours
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultures
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The Graph and Table bellow give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries from 1900 to 2000 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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