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The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. https: //www. testbig. com/sites/default/files/a_4. jpg v.1

The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. https: //www. testbig. com/sites/default/files/a_4. jpg v. 1
In a modern lifestyle, eating of junk food has risen tremendously in people especially children and adults. While it is possible to claim that it is the quick, convenient and inexpensive way to feed stomach in the busy time schedule. On the contrary, it is very harmful to our healthy life. My view is that harmful effect outweighs advantageous side. In this essay, I shall explain my point of view on both sides of the arguments. There are myriad reasons why junk foods are disadvantageous for people. One of them is that it has lack of nutrition so that it does not provide any required nourishment to the body. Also, fast foods are the major cause of so many dangerous diseases such as obesity, cardiovascular and diabetes. For instance, around one-third of the population of the United States of America is suffering from obesity disease and spending so much money on their treatments because obesity may be a reason for death also. Probing further, eating outside, generally fast food, can affect your family cohesiveness as eating together with dining table allows parents to talk and discuss with their children in the peaceful environment. On the flip side, some people claim that junk food is the most suitable and a rapid way to feed the stomach in extremely busy daily life. Also, these foods are cheaper than other food product and easily available at everywhere any time of the day. In addition, there are numerous kinds of junk food available and the taste is often good. In conclusion, having junk food outside is not a good habit for healthy life. In my point of view, you cannot be prohibited to sell this, but people should aware of the negative effect of this because it indirectly affects human life in term of health, money and socially as well.
In a modern lifestyle, eating of
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junk
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food
has risen
tremendously
in
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people
especially
children and adults. While it is possible to claim that it is the quick, convenient and inexpensive way to feed stomach in the busy time schedule.
On the contrary
, it is
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very
harmful to our healthy
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life
. My view is that harmful effect outweighs advantageous side. In this essay, I shall
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explain
my point of view on both sides of the arguments.

There are myriad reasons why
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junk
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foods
are disadvantageous for
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people
. One of them is that it has lack of nutrition
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so
that it does not provide any required nourishment to the body.
Also
,
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fast
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foods
are the major cause of
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so
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many
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dangerous
diseases such as obesity, cardiovascular and diabetes.
For instance
, around one-third of the population of the United States of America is suffering from obesity disease and spending
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so
much money on their treatments
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because
obesity may be a reason for death
also
. Probing
further
, eating outside,
generally
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fast
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food
, can affect your family cohesiveness as eating together with dining table
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allows
parents to talk and discuss with their children in the peaceful environment.

On the flip side,
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some
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people
claim that
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junk
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food
is the most suitable and a rapid way to feed the stomach in
extremely
busy daily
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life
.
Also
, these
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foods
are cheaper than other
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food
product and
easily
available at everywhere any time of the day.
In addition
, there are numerous kinds of
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junk
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food
available and the taste is
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often
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good
.

In conclusion
, having
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junk
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food
outside is not a
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good
habit for healthy
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life
.
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In
my point of view, you cannot
be prohibited
to sell this,
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but
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people
should aware of the
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negative
effect of this
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because
it
indirectly
affects human
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life
in term of health, money and
socially
as well
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. https: //www. testbig. com/sites/default/files/a_4. jpg v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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