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1. The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020 v.2

1. The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020 v. 2
The pie chart and line graph illustrate the information about the amount of CO2 emission and the figure of equipages in Britain and Wales from 2000 to 2020. Overall, both of figures witness an upward trend during the period of time. In particular, the amount of CO2 emission which made by car was highest over the period of time, at 20 tons, 23 tons and more 25 tons in 2000, 2010 and 2020 respectively. This was followed by the emissions was produced by truck. It was lowest in 2000, at 15 tons. It grew up 18 tons in 2010 which will become 23 tons in 2020. The third was the amount of CO2 of Van. This figure saw slowly rise between 2000 and 2020, at 14 tons to 15 tons respectively. Finally, the amount of CO2 emissions of bus noticed unchanged. It was 9 tons in the 2000-2020 period. Meanwhile, the number of vehicles showed quickly increase. It had 20 million in 2000, which grow up to 40 million in 2015. This figure will be 50 million in 2020.
The pie chart and line graph illustrate the information about the
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of CO2
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emission
and the
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figure
of equipages in Britain and Wales from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, both of
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figures
witness an upward trend during the period of time.

In particular
, the
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amount
of CO2
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emission
which made by car was
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highest
over the period of time, at 20 tons, 23 tons and more 25 tons in 2000, 2010 and 2020
respectively
. This
was followed
by the
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emissions
was produced
by truck. It was lowest in 2000, at 15 tons. It grew up 18 tons in 2010 which will become 23 tons in 2020. The third was the
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amount
of CO2 of Van. This
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figure
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saw
slowly
rise between 2000 and 2020, at 14 tons to 15 tons
respectively
.
Finally
, the
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amount
of CO2
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emissions
of bus noticed unchanged. It was 9 tons in the 2000-2020 period. Meanwhile, the number of vehicles
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showed
quickly
increase. It had 20 million in 2000, which grow up to 40 million in 2015. This
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figure
will be 50 million in 2020.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay 1. The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020 v. 2

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
179 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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