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1. The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020 v.1

1. The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020 v. 1
Nowadays, the overall output produced by education providers with respect to the quality of education is in a steady decline. Many reasons contribute to this serious problem. In this essay, I will discuss the main causes of this problem and suggest solutions to some of it. To begin with, the primary cause of this issue is many schools are run for profit. Universities and colleges managed by private owners increasingly focus on building a successful organization rather than producing knowledgeable individuals. In fact, Eastern countries, including India and Singapore have more than ten commercial colleges for one public non-profit school. Furthermore, lack of in-house facilities hinders students from achieving real-time knowledge. For instance, many schools teach textual subjects and does not provide enough practical laboratory sessions. A lot of these issues can be addressed by devising stringent government policies with regard to approving and monitoring private schools. Undoubtedly, regular inspections to assess the quality of facilities will help to curb institutions with inadequate infrastructure. In addition, exposure given to students outside of the classroom should be entertained by the management. In evidence, students with internship experiences are preferred in a job-placement over others who have only academic achievements. To summarize, the downgrade in the standard of education is real and an important issue to be addressed. To achieve this, a collective effort from the public and private sector is required. Governments imposing tougher rules on private universities and educational institutions increasing more real time learning experience could be a good starting point to fixing these issues.
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schools
are run
for profit. Universities and colleges managed by
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private
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teach textual subjects and does not provide
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practical laboratory sessions.

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private
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academic achievements.

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, the downgrade in the standard of education is real and an
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universities and educational institutions increasing more real time learning experience could be a
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starting point to fixing these
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IELTS essay 1. The graph and chart give information and forecast about the vehicle and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020 v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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