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The government should take responsibility for their actions to the environment. To what extent do you agree? v.1

The government should take responsibility for their actions to the environment. v. 1
Environmental damage can cause the extinction of some species due to the loss of their natural habitats and food sources. It is believed that government has the biggest power for taking the course of actions to save the environment. In this essay, I shall give some facts and opinions to support this statement. To begin with, only the government who has the privilege to state some regulations in the constitutions and enforce the law for either small or big violation. For example, spitting and littering, illegal logging, dumping unprocessed waste to the rivers, and so on. While the environmental activists only can report and do some protests to protect our nature, the government has the rights to fine and jail either citizens or companies who damage the environment. Second, only the government who has the rights to build a conservation land for the endangered species. For example, the building of one-horned rhinoceros in Banten, West Java. This can prevent the extinction of the endangered species. Another example is the damaging of Borneo’s forest that ruin the Orang Utans’ life. These animals need to be relocated soon as the government is still solving the issues regarding the forest destruction happened in Borneo island. Orang Utans can be sent back to their natural habitat after the problem has been solved. In conclusion, the government has the mandate to enforce the law and has the rights to build a conservation land to protect the endangered species and its habitat. Hence, I believe that government has to do some necessary course of actions to save the environment.
Environmental damage can cause the extinction of
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species due to the loss of their natural habitats and food sources. It
is believed
that
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government
has the biggest power for taking the course of actions to save the environment. In this essay, I shall give
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some
facts and opinions to support this statement.

To
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begin
with,
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only
the
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government
who has the privilege to state
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some
regulations in the constitutions and enforce the law for either
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small
or
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big
violation.
For example
, spitting and littering, illegal logging, dumping unprocessed waste to the rivers, and
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so
on. While the environmental activists
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only
can report and do
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some
protests to protect our nature, the
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government
has the rights to fine and jail either citizens or
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companies
who damage the environment.

Second,
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only
the
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government
who has the rights to build a conservation land for the endangered species.
For example
, the building of one-horned rhinoceros in
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Banten
, West Java. This can
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prevent
the extinction of the endangered species. Another example is the damaging of Borneo’s forest that ruin the
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Orang
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Utans
’ life. These animals need to
be relocated
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soon
as the
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government
is
still
solving the issues regarding the forest destruction happened in Borneo island.
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Orang
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Utans
can be
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sent
back to their natural habitat after the problem has
been solved
.

In conclusion
, the
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government
has the mandate to enforce the law and has the rights to build a conservation land to protect the endangered species and its habitat.
Hence
, I believe that
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government
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has to
do
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some
necessary course of actions to save the environment.
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IELTS essay The government should take responsibility for their actions to the environment. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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