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The government can take a variety of actions to help protect the environment. Whichone of the following do you think is the most important for the nation’s governmentto take to protect the environment. 1. Fund the research to develop environmentally frie v.1

The government can take a variety of actions to help protect the environment. Whichone of the following do you think is the most important for the nation’s governmentto take to protect the environment. 1. Fund the research to develop environmentally frie v. 1
In the present situation where there is a lot of waste from homes, it is a debatable issue whether the government has to make strong law in order to let citizens recycle their trash or not. I personally believe that the public facilities have to make a strict law to encourage the nations to do recycle more than now. On the one hand. It is partly true that people can recycle on themselves. In the first place, nowadays, most people are concerned the global warming. So they try to separate their own garbage. For example, compared to the past, modern people have lots of concerns about recycle. According to the reports, the rate of recycles have been increased notably and this has been kept for a long time. And, it means that awareness of the nations is higher than the past. Nevertheless, I am a person who maintains that the government have to suppose a legal requirement. First of all, no matter how the awareness of the nations is encouraged, if there are not stringent law, people won't have to take care of their trash. Then, in the world, the waste should be increased rapidly. It can be impacted on global warming more seriously. Another worth mention is that the strict law can play a crucial role to make more recycle rates. No matter how the people can recycle themselves well, it is fact that the people are highly likely to concern their awareness about recycling. In conclusion, I contend that the government have to make a strick law which can be impacted on the nation's recycling.
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a lot of
waste from homes, it is a debatable issue whether the
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government
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has to
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make
strong
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law
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let
citizens
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recycle
their trash or not. I
personally
believe that the public facilities
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have to
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make
a strict
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law
to encourage the nations to do
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recycle
more than
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now
.

On the one hand. It is partly true that
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people
can
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recycle
on themselves. In the
first
place, nowadays, most
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people
are concerned
the global warming.
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So
they try to separate their
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own
garbage.
For example
, compared to the past, modern
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people
have lots of concerns about
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recycle
. According to the reports, the rate of
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recycles
have
been increased
notably
and this has been
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kept
for a long time. And, it means that awareness of the nations is higher than the past.

Nevertheless
, I am a person who maintains that the
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government
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have to
suppose a legal requirement.
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First of all
, no matter how the awareness of the nations
is encouraged
, if there are not stringent
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law
,
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people
won't
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have to
take care of their trash. Then, in the world, the waste should
be increased
rapidly
. It can
be impacted
on global warming more
seriously
. Another worth mention is that the strict
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law
can play a crucial role to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
recycle
rates. No matter how the
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people
can
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recycle
themselves well, it is fact that the
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people
are
highly
likely to concern their awareness about recycling.

In conclusion
, I contend that the
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government
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have to
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make
a
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strick
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law
which can
be impacted
on the nation's recycling.
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IELTS essay The government can take a variety of actions to help protect the environment. Whichone of the following do you think is the most important for the nation’s governmentto take to protect the environment. 1. Fund the research to develop environmentally frie v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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