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The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. v. 5
The rate of environmental pollution is on the increase. however, the leaders ought to shut down factories that generates poisonous waste materials that doesn' t have their own treatment facility so as to beshield the surroundings. I agree with this notion and the reason for this would be explained in the essay. The rate of environmental pollution is on the increase. however, the leaders ought to shut down factories that generates poisonus waste materials that doesn' t have their own treatment facility so as to beshield the surroundings. I agree with this notion and the reason for this would be explained in the essay. To begin with, the state should close down factories that lacks facility for treating poisonus substances. this is perhaps because such toxic substances when released by the different companies into the atmosphere or in the land, could have an adverse effect on the surroundings, fauna, flora as well as the individuals. For example, the result of a survey carried out in different companies in Nigeria shows that at about 80 percent of harmful substances inform of liquids deposited into the streams and rivers, have rendered it contaminated and unsuitable for usage. Furthermore, the hazardous industrial wastes generated by the manufacturing industries has a negative and long term effect on the health of the members of the society. this includes chemicals such as lead, benzene, chloroform, and asbesto could damage the organs of individuals. however, such chemicals harms the body and can be gotten via inhalation, or coming in contact with the chemicals, which will predispose the person to respiratory problems such as asthma or bronchopnemonia, inflammation of the skin, cancer and dryness of the throat. Therefore, the leaders should impose strict laws and close down of companies that does not comply to the rules and regulations. In conclusion, I agree that the states should close factories that emits poisonous gases without having treatment facilitates because it eafects the populace as well as the surrounding environment. Perhaps, I would suggest that the leaders and individuals should work hand in hand to protect the society and reduce toxic gases.
The rate of environmental pollution is on the increase.
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however
, the
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leaders
ought to shut
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down
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factories
that generates poisonous waste materials that
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doesn&
#039; t have their
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own
treatment facility
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so as to
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beshield
the
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surroundings
. I
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agree
with this notion and the reason for this would be
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explained
in the essay.

The rate of environmental pollution is on the increase.
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however
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leaders
ought to shut
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down
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factories
that generates
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poisonus
waste materials that
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doesn&
#039; t have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
treatment facility
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
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beshield
the
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surroundings
. I
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agree
with this notion and the reason for this would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
in the essay.

To
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begin
with, the state should close
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down
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factories
that lacks facility for treating
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poisonus
substances.
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this
is perhaps
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because
such toxic substances when released by the
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different
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companies
into the atmosphere or in the land, could have an adverse effect on the
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surroundings
, fauna, flora
as well
as the individuals.

For example
, the result of a survey carried out in
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different
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companies
in Nigeria
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shows
that at about 80 percent of harmful substances inform of liquids deposited into the streams and rivers, have rendered it contaminated and unsuitable for usage.

Furthermore
, the hazardous industrial wastes generated by the manufacturing industries has a
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negative
and long term effect on the health of the members of the society.
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this
includes chemicals such as lead, benzene, chloroform, and
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asbesto
could damage the organs of individuals.
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however
, such chemicals harms the body and can
be gotten
via inhalation, or coming in contact with the chemicals, which will predispose the person to respiratory problems such as asthma or
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bronchopnemonia
, inflammation of the skin, cancer and dryness of the throat.
Therefore
, the
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leaders
should impose strict laws and close
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down
of
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companies
that does not comply to the
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rules
and regulations.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that the states should close
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factories
that emits poisonous gases without having treatment facilitates
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because
it
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eafects
the populace
as well
as the
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surrounding
environment. Perhaps, I would suggest that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
leaders
and individuals should work hand in hand to protect the society and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
toxic gases.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
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IELTS essay The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. v. 5

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
351 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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