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The government should ban smoking in all public places even though this would restrict some other people s freedoms 1
It is a bitter truth that health is important for every nation, but not acceptable that public health is only the responsibility of the governments. People have different opinion on this concern. This essay will highlight the views of the people and seriousness for it. Due to the increasing in the population number, health is a big concern and our government is increasing the budget every year for the healthcare, but our healthy index going down largely. For example, The Executives have organised the camp and doctors have diagnosed properly and provide the medicine accordingly, while patients are not taking it on time as per their guidance then surely it will badly affect the body and become more serious. In such cases, The Administration has done their duty and we can't blame them and it is our fault that we have not accepted it broadly. Is blaming on anyone solving the issue? The answer is absolutely wrong. Although, government has been assigned two-third part of their budget for this Department. On the other hand, People have their opinion that everyone have their understanding of Rudimentary things for physical fitness and the will try to do some regular exercise as well as yoga and various other activities which will help them to make fit. Moreover, taking the nutritions like ample fruits or vegetables which make their bones strong and improve their potential for work. In conclusion, This is everyone's responsibility not only for the government, but also for the humans. People should plan their day and reserve at least a few hours for their body maintenance because this will give them more motivation in the future. According to me, local bodies steps are not giving fruitful result if we don't do the awareness for the campaign and alert them with the harmful results.
It is a bitter truth that health is
important
for every nation,
but
not acceptable that public health is
only
the responsibility of the
governments
.
People
have
different
opinion on this concern. This essay will highlight the views of the
people
and seriousness for it.

Due to the increasing in the population number, health is a
big
concern and our
government
is increasing the budget every year for the healthcare,
but
our healthy index going down
largely
.
For example
, The Executives have
organised
the camp and doctors have diagnosed
properly
and provide the medicine
accordingly
, while patients are not taking it on time as per their guidance then
surely
it will
badly
affect the body and become more serious. In such cases, The Administration has done their
duty and
we can't blame them and it is our fault that we have not
accepted
it
broadly
. Is blaming on anyone solving the issue? The answer is
absolutely
wrong
.

Although,
government
has
been assigned
two-third part of their budget for this

Department.

On the other hand
,
People
have their opinion that everyone have their understanding of

Rudimentary things for physical fitness and
the
will try to do
some
regular exercise
as well
as yoga and various other activities which will
help
them to
make
fit.
Moreover
, taking the
nutritions
like ample fruits or vegetables which
make
their bones strong and
improve
their potential for work.

In conclusion
, This is everyone's responsibility not
only
for the
government
,
but
also
for the humans.
People
should plan their day and reserve at least a few hours for their body maintenance
because
this will give them more motivation in the future.
According to me
, local bodies steps are not giving fruitful result if we don't do the awareness for the campaign and alert them with the harmful results.
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IELTS essay The government should ban smoking in all public places even though this would restrict some other people s freedoms 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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