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In recent years many governments has brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with banning smoking in public places? v.1

In recent years many governments has brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. with banning smoking in public places? v. 1
It is undeniable that smoking is injurious to health and many governments are taking measures to create awareness to people about the health problems caused by smoking. More and more young people fall prey to smoking habits and hence governments are bringing in laws to ban smoking in public places with an intention to encourage people to stop smoking. I totally agree with this move by the government. Firstly, smoking causes serious health issues not only for smokers, but also for non-smokers. A recent study has proven that passive smokers get equally affected as smokers. Moreover, if someone is smoking in public places, it is very uncomfortable for non-smokers as it causes uneasiness and headache for non-smokers. Secondly, smoking in public places can cause fire accidents. For example, in March 2019 there was serious fire accident in an air show that happened in Bangalore which was caused due to burning cigar bud. Many cars were burnt and some people got injured. Finally, young children see people smoking in public places and feel smoking is cool and get tempted to try smoking. Also, kids get into bad habits like stealing money and telling lies. On the other hand some people feel that there should be no ban on smoking. People who are addicted to smoking cannot stay for long hours without smoking and they feel that there should be a smoking zone in public places rather that a complete ban. In conclusion, since smoking causes serious health damages government should ban people from smoking in public places and serious measures should be taken to educate teenagers about the ill effects of smoking. However, there can be a designated area for smoking in offices, restaurants, etc so that smokers can use this area alone for smoking than causing discomfort for other people by smoking in public places.
It is undeniable that
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smoking
is injurious to
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health
and
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many
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governments
are taking measures to create awareness to
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people
about the
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health
problems caused by
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smoking
. More and more young
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people
fall prey to
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smoking
habits and
hence
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governments
are bringing in laws to ban
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smoking
in
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public
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places
with an intention to encourage
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people
to
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stop
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smoking
. I
totally
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agree
with this
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move
by the
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government
.

Firstly
,
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smoking
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causes
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serious
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health
issues not
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only
for smokers,
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but
also
for non-smokers. A recent study has proven that passive smokers
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get
equally
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affected
as smokers.
Moreover
, if someone is
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smoking
in
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public
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places
, it is
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very
uncomfortable for non-smokers as it
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causes
uneasiness and headache for non-smokers.
Secondly
,
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smoking
in
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public
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places
can
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cause
fire accidents.
For example
, in March 2019 there was
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serious
fire accident in an air
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show
that happened in Bangalore which
was caused
due to burning cigar bud.
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Many
cars
were burnt
and
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some
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people
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got
injured.
Finally
, young children
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see
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people
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smoking
in
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public
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places
and feel
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smoking
is cool and
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get
tempted to try
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smoking
.
Also
, kids
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get
into
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bad
habits like stealing money and telling lies.

On the other hand
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some
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people
feel that there should be no ban on
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smoking
.
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People
who
are addicted
to
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smoking
cannot stay for long hours without
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smoking and
they feel that there should be a
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smoking
zone in
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public
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places
rather
that a complete ban.

In conclusion
, since
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smoking
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causes
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serious
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health
damages
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government
should ban
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people
from
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smoking
in
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public
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places
and
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serious
measures should
be taken
to educate
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teenagers
about the ill effects of
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smoking
.
However
, there can be a designated area for
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smoking
in offices, restaurants, etc
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so
that smokers can
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use
this area alone for
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smoking
than causing discomfort for other
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people
by
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smoking
in
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public
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places
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In recent years many governments has brought in laws to ban smoking in public places, such as bars, restaurants and offices. with banning smoking in public places? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
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