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Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem Do you agree or disagree Give your opinion and suggest a solution to the problem v.1

Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem Give your opinion and suggest a solution to the problem v. 1
Smoking is dangerous to health which many people know it, but still they get addicted to this habit in a way that they cannot resist themselves into stopping it. This essay discusses both the causes and remedies to smoking. Firstly, smoking is a way of reducing stress and pressure in one’s lives, which is the common reason heard from many people. Although this is factual, there are people who smoke for pleasure or by the compulsion of their peer groups. Moreover, they get addicted in such a way that they cannot leave the habit and eventually become chain smokers. For instance, a colleague at my office is a chain smoker and he told the reason for doing it is because his friends compelled him into it and now, he became dependant on it. Secondly, young adults acquire these mannerisms from their elders right from a small age. Moreover, there are many children who try to steal cigar packets from their father’s pocket and smoke in a secret place. For example, a boy from my neighbourhood started smoking at the age of 12 and he became so obsessed that he used to smoke a packet per day. However, a few days ago he passed away due to lung cancer, which is caused due to smoking from a small age. Moreover, there are many ways to reduce smoking in the society like government, can impose heavy taxes on cigarettes. The council can set up a rehabilitation in each area and encourage the obsessive people to cigars into joining these centres. Furthermore, many attractive campaigns and advertisements regarding the after effects of smoking can be put up on televisions and on internets therefore creating awareness among them. In conclusion, there can be many reasons for smoking, but with the help of the government and also the efforts from the public side to minimize smoking, this habit among the people can be controlled.
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dangerous
to health which
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many
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people
know it,
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but
still
they
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get
addicted to this habit in a way that they cannot resist themselves into stopping it. This essay discusses both the causes and remedies to smoking.

Firstly
,
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smoking
is a way of reducing
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stress
and pressure in one’s
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lives
, which is the common reason heard from
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many
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people
. Although this is factual, there are
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people
who smoke for pleasure or by the compulsion of their peer groups.
Moreover
, they
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get
addicted in such a way that they cannot
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leave
the habit and
eventually
become chain smokers.
For instance
, a colleague at my office is a chain
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smoker and
he
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told
the reason for doing it is
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because
his friends compelled him into it and
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now
, he became
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dependant
on it.
Secondly
, young adults acquire these mannerisms from their elders right from a
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small
age.
Moreover
, there are
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many
children who try to steal cigar packets from their father’s pocket and smoke in a secret place.
For example
, a boy from my
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neighbourhood
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started
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smoking
at the age of
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12 and
he became
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so
obsessed that he
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used
to smoke a packet per day.
However
, a few days ago he passed away due to lung cancer, which
is caused
due to
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smoking
from a
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small
age.

Moreover
, there are
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many
ways to
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reduce
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smoking
in the society like
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government
, can impose heavy taxes on cigarettes. The council can set up a rehabilitation in each area and encourage the obsessive
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people
to cigars into joining these
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centres
.
Furthermore
,
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many
attractive campaigns and advertisements regarding the after effects of
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smoking
can
be put
up on televisions and on
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internets
therefore
creating awareness among them.

In conclusion
, there can be
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many
reasons for
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smoking
,
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but
with the
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help
of the
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government
and
also
the efforts from the public side to minimize
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smoking
, this habit among the
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people
can
be controlled
.
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IELTS essay Nowadays traffic jams are becoming a big problem in most cities and bigger towns Some people suggest that widening of roads is a solution to this problem Give your opinion and suggest a solution to the problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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