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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree? v.4

The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. v. 4
In today's world, there are many existing school-subjects which are essential for countries' advancement. It has been argued by some people whether governments' ought to allot more money to implement teaching sciences into schools' curriculum. The main reason to support my opinion is that scientific professions such as doctors, physicists, biologists, they all contribute to countries' progression via various devices of technology, which are created by them. Thus, if a country's government spends more resources to educate people with more essential subjects, then it might lead them to scientific discoveries due to the contribution which had been done by the government by giving what people deserve. For example, some countries are more progressed than others because their main concerns are concentrated on their improvement, and they pay less attention to others' politics. Another point to consider is that if the majority of the countries spent their resources into educating people, then they would elevate the quality of life by creating devices which could allow people to do thorough scrutiny and detect any malignant diseases in their early stages. Therefore, it would prolong people's life span and additionally, those scientists would develop different ways to harvest more crop, which would help many people, not only in their country but worldwide. For instance, one such scientific discovery can lead to the eradication of famine around the world, although in some cases this is caused artificially due to some unknown reasons. In conclusion, I firmly believe that in the case of governments' funding to teaching sciences, can advance those countries technologically, which could elevate the quality of life.
In
today
's world, there are
many
existing school-subjects which are essential for countries' advancement. It has
been argued
by
some
people
whether
governments
' ought to allot more money to implement teaching sciences into schools' curriculum.

The main reason to support my opinion is that scientific professions such as doctors, physicists, biologists, they all contribute to countries' progression via various devices of technology, which
are created
by them.
Thus
, if a country's
government
spends more resources to educate
people
with more essential subjects, then it might lead them to scientific discoveries due to the contribution which had
been done
by the
government
by giving what
people
deserve.
For example
,
some
countries
are more progressed than others
because
their main concerns
are concentrated
on their improvement, and they pay less attention to others' politics.

Another point to consider is that if the majority of the
countries
spent their resources into educating
people
, then they would elevate the quality of life by creating devices which could
allow
people
to do thorough scrutiny and detect any malignant diseases in their early stages.
Therefore
, it would prolong
people
's life span and
additionally
, those scientists would develop
different
ways to harvest more crop, which would
help
many
people
, not
only
in their
country
but
worldwide.
For instance
, one such scientific discovery can lead to the eradication of famine around the world, although in
some
cases this
is caused
artificially
due to
some
unknown reasons.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that in the case of
governments
' funding to teaching sciences, can advance those
countries
technologically
, which could elevate the quality of life.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. v. 4

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  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
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