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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. v. 5
When considering the movement of professional workers to rich countries, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue. Some people believe this movement is part of the normal shifts happening in the international job market. Others, including myself, think that encouraging people with professional experience to work in developed countries in order to gain a higher salary is immoral and should be regulated. In the following essay, I will provide arguments and examples to support my opinion. Encouraging qualified personal from underdeveloped and poor countries to move to richer areas, increase the economical and financial differences, and prevents nations from developing their economy. When qualified personal like physicians, teachers and engeneers are encouraged to migrate to countries with better paying positions, a vacancy is formed which is unfortunately occupied by lesser experiecne personal. Consequently, the quality of work is damaged, further widening the differences between the countries. This can be seen in Hungary where many medical physicians were offered a position in Germeny in the last 10 years. As a result, the Hungarian health system has deteriorated substantially, directly effecting the health of the local population. This demonstrates that by stealing knowledgable people, a deficit is formed, which have a negative effect on poorer countries. Another argument estblishing the fact that migration of qualified workers is similar to stealing, is that many countries prefer to import professional workers rather than training people, because it is financially preferable. The overall cost of educating of a computer scientist, for example, is substantially higher then the salary given to a foreign scientist. Also, the annual salary given to a foreign surgent is much less than the cost of training one. These examples demosnstrate that for rich countries, is it financially lucrative to important foreign qualified workers, rather than to educate them. In conclusion, I believe that convincing people to migrate to richer countries for work purposes is similar to stealing because it prevents poor countries to use their human resources on one hand, and assist rich countries to become richer. We should aspire to have an equall society and assist each other.
When considering the movement of professional
workers
to rich
countries
, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
Some
people
believe this movement is part of the normal shifts happening in the international job market. Others, including myself,
think
that encouraging
people
with professional experience to work in developed
countries
in order to gain a higher salary is immoral and should
be regulated
. In the following essay, I will provide arguments and examples to support my opinion.

Encouraging
qualified
personal
from underdeveloped and poor
countries
to
move
to richer areas, increase the economical and financial differences, and
prevents
nations from developing their economy. When
qualified
personal
like physicians, teachers and
engeneers
are encouraged
to migrate to
countries
with better paying positions, a vacancy
is formed
which is unfortunately occupied by lesser
experiecne
personal.
Consequently
, the quality of work
is damaged
,
further
widening the differences between the
countries
. This can be
seen
in Hungary where
many
medical physicians
were offered
a position in
Germeny
in the last 10 years.
As a result
, the Hungarian health system has deteriorated
substantially
,
directly
effecting the health of the local population. This demonstrates that by stealing
knowledgable
people
, a deficit
is formed
, which have a
negative
effect on poorer countries.

Another argument
estblishing
the fact that migration of
qualified
workers
is similar to stealing, is that
many
countries
prefer to import professional
workers
rather
than training
people
,
because
it is
financially
preferable. The
overall
cost of educating of a computer scientist,
for example
, is
substantially
higher then
the salary
given
to a foreign scientist.
Also
, the annual salary
given
to a foreign
surgent
is much less than the cost of training one. These examples
demosnstrate
that for rich
countries
, is it
financially
lucrative to
important
foreign
qualified
workers
,
rather
than to educate them.

In conclusion
, I believe that convincing
people
to migrate to richer
countries
for work purposes is similar to stealing
because
it
prevents
poor
countries
to
use
their human resources on one hand, and assist rich
countries
to become richer. We should aspire to have an
equall
society and assist each other.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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