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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree? v.5

The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. v. 5
Science is the source of all the advancements in the world. For a country to advance and prosper, more resources ought to be deployed by the government in teaching sciences instead of other subjects. I agree with this view as science is the only subject which not only enables us to identify the causes of real-life problems but also assists in finding their solutions. Countries come across various issues in numerous walks of life, such as food, water, healthcare, and the environment. To overcome any problem, it is necessary to ascertain the root cause of the problem. Science teaches how to look at any underlying situation and analyze the factors related to it, and drive conclusions accordingly. For example, science greatly contributed to discovering the causes of diseases that costed several human lives in the past, while those diseases could easily be prevented and cured. If science was not introduced to the masses, humanity would not be able to survive today. Moreover, besides ascertaining the core factors of any issue, science has also guided humans to explore the solutions to those issues. Due to the nature of the subject, science encourages experimentation, which not only leads to the solutions to a particular problem at hand but also benefits us with the knowledge that can be applied in solving other problems. For instance, when scientists were exploring oil as the energy source they discovered natural gas which is more environment-friendly and economical as compared to the oil. In conclusion, while other people’s opinions may vary, in my opinion, for a country to prosper and compete with the rest of the world, the governments ought to allocate ample resources in teaching science to the public as it will enable them to identify the contemporary problems yet solutions.
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is the source of all the advancements in the world. For a country to advance and prosper, more resources ought to
be deployed
by the
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government
in teaching
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sciences
instead
of other subjects. I
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agree
with this view as
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science
is the
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only
subject which not
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only
enables us to identify the causes of real-life
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problems
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but
also
assists in finding their solutions.

Countries
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come
across various issues in numerous walks of life, such as food, water, healthcare, and the environment. To overcome any
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problem
, it is necessary to ascertain the root cause of the
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problem
.
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Science
teaches how to look at any underlying situation and analyze the factors related to it, and drive conclusions
accordingly
.
For example
,
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science
greatly
contributed to discovering the causes of diseases that costed several human
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lives
in the past, while those diseases could
easily
be
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prevented
and cured. If
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science
was not introduced to the masses, humanity would not be able to survive
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today
.

Moreover
,
besides
ascertaining the core factors of any issue,
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science
has
also
guided humans to explore the solutions to those issues. Due to the nature of the subject,
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science
encourages experimentation, which not
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only
leads to the solutions to a particular
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problem
at hand
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but
also
benefits us with the knowledge that can
be applied
in solving other
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problems
.
For instance
, when scientists were exploring oil as the energy source they discovered natural gas which is more environment-friendly and economical as compared to the oil.

In conclusion
, while other
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people
’s opinions may vary, in my opinion, for a country to prosper and compete with the rest of the world, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
ought to allocate ample resources in teaching
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science
to the public as it will enable them to identify the contemporary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
yet
solutions.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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