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The government should allocate more funding to teaching science rather than other subjects in order to develop and progress. v.1

The government should allocate more funding to teaching science rather than other subjects in order to develop and progress. v. 1
I totally agree that system is based on the experiment. Learning is based on the teaching because people are learning through teaching and some people are learning through experience. The government should allocate more funding to teach information because they want new research for the development of the country. Development is supplement important for the country. I believe that other subject is important for social and political point of view. Most of the exams are based on the social system, mathematics, and Gujarati. Some people believe that the government should allocate more monetary resources for control teaching exposed at school and college level as compared to other subjects. The other liable will help in the overall personality development of students. It is only the conditional we should discover more product and new things. There are ample opportunities for employment in the field of self-restraint and technology. For example, I have a degree in the control field. So we should research based on a formula. In another way studying arts at school or college level helps students to vent out their stress. Some children are splendid in other subjects that does not mean they are not good in another field. The more the job opportunities, to better will be employment generation leading to economic growth and development. In conclusion, politics should not only allocate only self-control subjects, but other subjects as art. Other sensitive will help them remain healthy and stay fit. It is good for the students and help from the ministry. The government will help to other people.
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that system
is based
on the experiment. Learning
is based
on the teaching
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because
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people
are learning through teaching and
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some
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people
are learning through experience.

The
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government
should allocate more funding to teach information
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because
they want new research for the development of the country. Development is supplement
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important
for the country. I believe that
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other
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subject
is
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important
for social and political point of view. Most of the exams
are based
on the social system, mathematics, and Gujarati.
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Some
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people
believe that the
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government
should allocate more monetary resources for control teaching exposed at school and college level as compared to
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other
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subjects
. The
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other
liable will
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help
in the
overall
personality development of students. It is
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only
the conditional we should discover more product and new things. There are ample opportunities for employment in the field of self-restraint and technology.
For example
, I have a degree in the control field.
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So
we should research based on a formula.

In another way studying arts at school or college level
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helps
students to vent out their
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stress
.
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Some
children are splendid in
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other
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subjects
that does not mean they are not
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good
in another field. The more the job opportunities, to better will be employment generation leading to economic growth and development.

In conclusion
, politics should not
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only
allocate
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only
self-control
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subjects
,
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but
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other
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subjects
as art.
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Other
sensitive will
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help
them remain healthy and stay fit. It is
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good
for the students and
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help
from the ministry. The
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government
will
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help
to
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other
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people
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The government should allocate more funding to teaching science rather than other subjects in order to develop and progress. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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