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The government has the duty to ensure its citizen have a healthy diet while others believe it is individual s responsibility Discuss both views and give tour own opinion v.2

The government has the duty to ensure its citizen have a healthy diet while others believe it is individual s responsibility 2
In this contemporary setting, healthy lifestyle is given paramount significance. Some are of the opinion that the government is responsible for people’s healthy diet, other’s believe the individual should make their dietary plan. Considering this situation, it is crucial to explore this from two perspectives. To begin with, there are several reasons why the government plays a pivotal role in ensuring the public eat healthily. To be specific, many fast foods tend to use attractive price and picture to entice people to have an unhealthy meal, so it is this appealing commercial effect that induces some young people to have no other choices. Therefore, the government should enact certain regulations to prevent unhealthy food promote their advertisements, especially targeting on young people who cannot afford the healthy meal. Thus, the government makes a significant contribution to ensuring people’s healthy diet. Besides, in order to lower the price of grocery products, many countries decide to import meats, fruits, and vegetables from different countries who specialize in exporting these things at a cheaper price. Consequently, the government should enforce quarantine inspections on these foods to clear out any unqualified and stale food out of the market. As a result, the government-oriented policy is an effective, efficient and pragmatic approach on people’s diet. On the other hand, the public adopting their dietary plans has benefits too, as people can adjust their diets swiftly. To be precise, many individuals have a clear understanding of their own life disciplines. For example, some people have entire knowledge of diverse food they are allergic to. For this reason, people normally make a diet plan based on their body condition and food which should be excluded, thereby feeding healthy meals to their body. Hence, individuals might be fully responsible for their dietary plan. Moreover, people among different ages tend to know the right food to put into their bodies. This is mainly because different age groups require different nutrition level to maintain health. For instance, young children need to drink milk to grow faster and stronger, and old people want to eat more vegetables to digest easily, which provides them with a healthy diet to live on. To sum up, it is apparent, the government has many legitimate concerns to ensure a healthy diet, such as restriction on advertisements, and safety inspections on imported foods. However, by no means should we turn a blind eye on the individual’s responsibility, which includes awareness of food allergy, and sufficient nutrition among different ages. Nevertheless, from my point view, government plays a vital role in keeping public health.
In this contemporary setting,
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healthy
lifestyle is
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given
paramount significance.
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Some
are of the opinion that the
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government
is responsible for
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people’s
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healthy
diet,
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other’s
believe the
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individual
should
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make
their dietary
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plan
. Considering this situation, it is crucial to explore this from two perspectives.

To
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begin
with, there are several reasons why the
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government
plays a pivotal role in ensuring the public eat
healthily
. To be specific,
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many
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fast
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foods
tend to
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use
attractive price and picture to entice
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people
to have an unhealthy meal,
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so
it is this appealing commercial effect that induces
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some
young
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people
to have no other choices.
Therefore
, the
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government
should enact certain regulations to
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prevent
unhealthy
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food
promote their advertisements,
especially
targeting on young
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people
who cannot afford the
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healthy
meal.
Thus
, the
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government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
a significant contribution to ensuring
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people’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
diet.
Besides
, in order to lower the price of grocery products,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
countries decide to import meats, fruits, and vegetables from
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different
countries who specialize in exporting these things at a cheaper price.
Consequently
, the
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government
should enforce quarantine inspections on these
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foods
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
out any unqualified and stale
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food
out of the market.
As a result
, the
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government
-oriented policy is an effective, efficient and pragmatic approach on
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people’s
diet.

On the other hand
, the public adopting their dietary
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plans
has benefits too, as
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people
can adjust their diets
swiftly
. To be precise,
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many
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individuals
have a
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clear
understanding of their
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own
life disciplines.
For example
,
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some
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people
have entire knowledge of diverse
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food
they are allergic to.
For this reason
,
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people
normally
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make
a diet
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plan
based on their body condition and
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food
which should
be excluded
, thereby feeding
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healthy
meals to their body.
Hence
,
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individuals
might be
fully
responsible for their dietary
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plan
.
Moreover
,
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people
among
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different
ages tend to know the right
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food
to put into their bodies. This is
mainly
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because
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different
age groups require
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different
nutrition level to maintain health.
For instance
, young children need to drink milk to grow faster and stronger, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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people
want to eat more vegetables to digest
easily
, which provides them with a
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healthy
diet to
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live
on.

To sum up, it is apparent, the
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government
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
legitimate concerns to ensure a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
diet, such as restriction on advertisements, and safety inspections on imported
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
.
However
, by no means should we turn a blind eye on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual’s
responsibility, which includes awareness of
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food
allergy, and sufficient nutrition among
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different
ages.
Nevertheless
, from my point view,
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government
plays a vital role in keeping public health.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The government has the duty to ensure its citizen have a healthy diet while others believe it is individual s responsibility 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
427 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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