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The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. SOme people think it would be better to our environment v.6

The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. SOme people think it would be better to our environment v. 6
Nobody can deny that there are certain professionals like nurses, doctors and teachers who are essential to the fabric of society, and who should therefore be rewarded accordingly. However, this is seldom the case. When we look at the checks and fees commanded by certain film stars and actresses and people who run large companies, this does not seem fair. First of all, not all film stars earn huge sums of cash. In fact, at any one time in the UK, for instance, roughly 80 percent of actors are out of work and on top of that, the number who are paid so-called ‘telephone number fees’ is even smaller. One must also remember that the future of many tv actors is very short and that thus the money they earn has to be spread over many years. The same applies to company bosses. Stating a set of criteria as to how much people should be paid is not easy. The idea of performance-related pay is very much in vogue at the moment. Rewarding people, according to qualifications has long been used as a yardstick for paying people, but it is not a consistently good measure. Nevertheless, there are many cases where a younger person can perform a task better than someone with lots of experience. Whatever criteria are used to evaluate salaries, an on-going cycle will develop. This will create pressure in other areas. This considered, generally I feel that certain key professionals should have their liquidation assessed by independent review bodies on an on-going basis so that they do not fall behind.
Nobody can deny that there are certain professionals like nurses, doctors and teachers
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who
are essential to the fabric of society, and
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who
should
therefore
be rewarded
accordingly
.
However
, this is seldom the case. When we look at the
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checks
and fees commanded by certain film stars and actresses and
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people
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who
run large
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companies
, this does not seem
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fair
.

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First of all
, not all film stars earn huge sums of cash. In fact, at any one time in the UK,
for instance
, roughly 80 percent of actors are out of work and
on top of that
, the number
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who
are paid
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so
-called ‘telephone number fees’ is even smaller. One
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must
also
remember that the future of
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many
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actors is
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very
short and that
thus
the money they earn
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has to
be spread
over
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years. The same
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applies to
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company
bosses.

Stating a set of criteria as to how much
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people
should
be paid
is not easy. The
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idea
of performance-related pay is
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very
much in vogue at the moment. Rewarding
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people
, according to qualifications has long been
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used
as a yardstick for paying
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people
,
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but
it is not a
consistently
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good
measure.
Nevertheless
, there are
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many
cases where a younger person can perform a task better than someone with lots of experience.

Whatever criteria are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to evaluate salaries, an
Did you mean "ongoing"?
on-going
cycle will develop. This will create pressure in other areas. This considered,
generally
I feel that certain key professionals should have their liquidation assessed by independent review bodies on an
Did you mean "ongoing"?
on-going
basis
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they do not fall behind.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. SOme people think it would be better to our environment v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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