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The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ole only locally produced food. What extent do the advantages out weigh the disadvantages? v.3

The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ole only locally produced food. What extent do the advantages out weigh the disadvantages? v. 3
Everyone would love to eat different types of foods in all season. Some people have the opinion that imported food has a detrimental effect on the local economy and culture and it would be better if people ate only locally produced food. However, I oppose this view. In my opinion, imported food brings many advantages and benefits which outweigh the disadvantages. To begin with, imported food has a negative effect on the local market. This can be seen in country like Japan, where imported food has become more popular compare to local traditional food. Secondly, imported food is not as fresh as it travels thousand of miles in packed containers so eating this kind of food can make people sick as well. On the flip side, There are numerous advantages of imported food. Firstly, imported food travel thousand of miles via air, sea or roads and countless people are associated with this such as wholesalers, labour, transport companies and many more. It generates employment for all of them. Secondly, it helps trade between countries. We all know, any country would not able to produce all varieties of food due to the different climate. Any country can produce only some variety of food and rest of them, they have to import from other countries. To illustrate with an example, India produces a very little quantity of kiwis annually and it would not fulfil the country needs. So India import kiwis from different countries and export other food to those countries which helps in the economy. To conclude, undoubtedly there are few disadvantages of imported food like it is not fresh, but Imported food has plenty of advantages such as generate employment and allow country to export other items which helps in the economy. Looking into all these factors, I believe imported food advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
Everyone would
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love
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types of
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foods
in all season.
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Some
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people
have the opinion that
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imported
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food
has a detrimental effect on the local economy and culture and it would be better if
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people
ate
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only
locally
produced
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food
.
However
, I oppose this view. In my opinion,
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imported
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food
brings
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many
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advantages
and benefits which outweigh the disadvantages.

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begin
with,
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imported
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food
has a
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negative
effect on the local market. This can be
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seen
in
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country
like Japan, where
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imported
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food
has become more popular compare to local traditional
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food
.
Secondly
,
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imported
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food
is not as fresh as it travels
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thousand
of miles in packed containers
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so
eating this kind of
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food
can
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make
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people
sick
as well
.

On the flip side, There are numerous
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advantages
of
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imported
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food
.
Firstly
,
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imported
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food
travel
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thousand
of miles via air, sea or roads and countless
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people
are associated
with this such as wholesalers,
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labour
, transport
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companies
and
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more. It generates employment for all of them.
Secondly
, it
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helps
trade between
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countries
. We all know, any
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country
would not able to produce all varieties of
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food
due to the
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different
climate. Any
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country
can produce
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only
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some
variety of
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food
and rest of them, they
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import from other
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countries
. To illustrate with an example, India produces a
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very
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little
quantity of kiwis
annually
and it would not fulfil the
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country
needs.
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So
India import kiwis from
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different
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countries
and export other
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food
to those
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countries
which
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helps
in the economy.

To conclude
,
undoubtedly
there are few disadvantages of
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imported
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food
like it is not fresh,
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but
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Imported
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food
has
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plenty
of
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advantages
such as generate employment and
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allow
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country
to export other items which
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helps
in the economy. Looking into all these factors, I believe
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imported
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food
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advantages
outweigh its disadvantages.
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44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The food travels thousands of miles from farm to consumer. Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only ole only locally produced food. What extent do the advantages out weigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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