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The first car appeared on the British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea. v.1

The first car appeared on the British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea. v. 1
The trend of owning personal cars is becoming increasingly popular. In the UK, the first car was seen in 1888 and the figure rose to 29 million in 2000. I completely agree that there must be encouragement of other means of travelling along-with some restriction of owning car and its use by international laws. Firstly, the major reason to direct people towards public transportation is air pollution. In order to save the ozone layer, which is protecting us against the dangerous and life-threatening rays of the sun, actions must be taken. Nowadays there are certain environmental campaigns warning us about the possible disaster of air pollution meanwhile spreading awareness among masses to educate them. For instant, ten persons using a public bus rather than individual cars can make a big difference. Secondly, another reason is a rather less addressed topic of status. If a man had a car, then he would be considered rich, educated and someone with good family background. How did this thought process begin in our societies? One easy solution to this problem is everyone using public vehicles as a means of transportation so that all members of a certain society feel equal. Lastly, certain laws must be imposed throughout the world to limit the easy accessibility of cars to everyone. For example, In Nigeria, only one car is allowed to be owned by one family. Furthermore, in Albania, the public transport is freely accessible to everyone living in that state so people are more drawn towards it. Amsterdam even got another name as 'a city of cycles' due to the introduction of cycling and persistence of this means of travelling. It was introduced by a simple 'rent a bike' service, later becoming the most famous in the whole world. To conclude that, I believe that different modes of transportation should be encouraged because of the risk of air pollution and status difference. Moreover, car ownership and its use should be limited legally in the world by making easy-to-follow laws.
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first
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was
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seen
in 1888 and the figure rose to 29 million in 2000. I completely
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agree
that there
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must
be encouragement of other means of travelling along-with
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some
restriction of owning
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car
and its
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use
by international laws.

Firstly
, the major reason to direct
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people
towards
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public
transportation is air pollution. In order to save the ozone layer, which is protecting us against the
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dangerous
and life-threatening rays of the sun, actions
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must
be taken
. Nowadays there are certain environmental campaigns warning us about the possible disaster of air pollution meanwhile spreading awareness among masses to educate them. For instant, ten persons using a
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public
bus
rather
than individual
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cars
can
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make
a
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big
difference.

Secondly
, another reason is a
rather
less addressed topic of status. If a
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man
had a
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car
, then he would
be considered
rich, educated and someone with
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good
family background. How did this
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thought
process
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begin
in our societies? One easy solution to this problem is everyone using
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public
vehicles as a means of transportation
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so
that all members of a certain society feel equal.

Lastly
, certain laws
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must
be imposed
throughout the world to limit the easy accessibility of
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cars
to everyone.
For example
, In Nigeria,
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only
one
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car
is
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allowed
to be
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owned
by one family.
Furthermore
, in Albania, the
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public
transport is
freely
accessible to everyone living in that state
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so
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people
are more drawn towards it. Amsterdam even
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got
another name as 'a city of cycles' due to the introduction of cycling and persistence of this means of travelling. It
was introduced
by a simple 'rent a bike' service, later becoming the most
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famous
in the whole world.

To conclude
that, I believe that
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different
modes of transportation should
be encouraged
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because
of the
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risk
of air pollution and status difference.
Moreover
,
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car
ownership and its
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use
should
be limited
legally
in the world by making easy-to-follow laws.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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The limits of my language are the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay The first car appeared on the British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. Give your own opinion on the issue. Use your own experience or an example to support your idea. v. 1

Essay
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5 paragraphs
333 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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