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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.4

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 4
Due to modernization and advancement in technology, the large proportion of vehicles, cars, has come into existence. However, this human progress has become a major culprit of environmental pollution. Therefore, some people think that higher authorities should impose certain laws and restrictions on the use of cars. In my view, I completely disagree with this statement. When it comes to transportation, the Incredible role of cars cannot be denied. In other words, cars are the most convenient mode of transportation and communication and it has also become the luxurious safest and private way of transportation, thereby, it is being prioritized by most people. Moreover, the time which is considered as a crucial factor, it can also be saved by these miracle vehicles. So, cars not only make people ride luxurious and enjoy full, but also make it most secure and private. However, having too many vehicles, cars, has become a significant cause of environmental deterioration by emitting Obnoxious gases in the environment such as CO2 and N2 and so on, which are the most common causes of various lethal diseases like cancers, respiratory diseases and so on. But it cannot be overlooked that these cars are playing the most remarkable role in the country and people progress through escalating communication and trade. Apart from this, it has also become a way of employment for many people in car manufacturing factories as a worker, car repairs, dealers and painters. Thus, I believe that despite imposing any kind of ban and restrictions on car owners and producers, the government and engineers should find alternatives to mitigate this pollution problem by introducing hydrogen, electric cars which are quite efficient than the petroleum and diesel-based cars. Conclusion of the above discussion is that although cars are becoming a mammoth issue for environment distortion, it also signs of evolution and human progress, which can not be restricted, because every single step against technology, could go against human progress, so, it needs to find alternatives.
Due to modernization and advancement in technology, the large proportion of vehicles,
cars
, has
come
into existence.
However
, this human
progress
has
become
a major culprit of environmental pollution.
Therefore
,
some
people
think
that higher authorities should impose certain laws and restrictions on the
use
of
cars
. In my view, I completely disagree with this statement.

When it
comes
to transportation, the Incredible role of
cars
cannot
be denied
.
In other words
,
cars
are the most convenient mode of transportation and communication and it has
also
become
the luxurious safest and private way of transportation, thereby, it is
being prioritized
by most
people
.
Moreover
, the time which
is considered
as a crucial factor, it can
also
be saved
by these miracle vehicles.
So
,
cars
not
only
make
people
ride luxurious and enjoy full,
but
also
make
it most secure and private.

However
, having too
many
vehicles,
cars
, has
become
a significant cause of environmental deterioration by emitting Obnoxious gases in the environment such as CO2 and N2 and
so
on, which are the most common causes of various lethal diseases like cancers, respiratory diseases and
so
on.
But
it cannot
be overlooked
that these
cars
are playing the most remarkable role in the country and
people
progress
through escalating communication and trade. Apart from this, it has
also
become
a way of employment for
many
people
in
car
manufacturing factories as a worker,
car
repairs, dealers and painters.

Thus
, I believe that despite imposing any kind of ban and restrictions on
car
owners and producers, the
government
and engineers should find alternatives to mitigate this pollution problem by introducing hydrogen, electric
cars
which are quite
efficient
than the petroleum and diesel-based cars.

Conclusion of the above discussion is that although
cars
are becoming a mammoth issue for environment distortion, it
also
signs of evolution and human
progress
, which can not
be restricted
,
because
every single step against technology, could go against human
progress
,
so
, it needs to find alternatives.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 4

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  American English
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329 words
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