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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.6

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 6
With the industrial revelution 100 years ago, a new methods of trasnportation immerged, among those is the automobile, since then, hundreds of millions of cars entered the roads. This trend had a negative impact on the helath of the communities around the world, thus forcing the authorities to decrease the numbers of car owners and provide people with alternative ways for transportation. I believe such measures would improve the life quality of people and help the environment. Turning firstly to the downsides of the cars, motor vehicles are one of the major causes of global warming and climate change, which might have a catastrophic imapcts on our planet and our way of life. For example, a recent study by the University of London has found that cars emit 25% of green house gases, hence raising the planet temprature by 0. 75 degrees. Therefore, automobiles have a longterm harmful impact. Moving on to solutions for this issue, on of the most successful measures is making car ownership more expensive, which will make people use public transportation more frequently, therefore, less cars on the road. Nevertheless, to adopt such solution, an effective alternatives should be available. For instance, When Singapore had increased the taxes on the cars by the double, it resulted in 20% less traffic on the roads, plus a significant improvement in air quality was noticed around the city. The tax raise was combined with new train and metro lines and an increase of number of buses around the city, hence, more options for car owners. In conclusion, I strongly believe that governments and international agencies should enforce new laws to take cars put of the roads, while at the same time give people motivations to use other methods of transportation. This would have a positive effects on the communities, environment, and life quality overall.
With the industrial
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revelution
100 years ago, a new
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methods
of
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trasnportation
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immerged
, among
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those is
the automobile, since then, hundreds of millions of
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cars
entered the
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roads
. This trend had a
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negative
impact on the
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helath
of the communities around the world,
thus
forcing the authorities to decrease the numbers of
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car
owners and provide
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people
with alternative ways for transportation. I believe such measures would
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improve
the life quality of
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people
and
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help
the environment.

Turning
firstly
to the downsides of the
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cars
, motor vehicles are one of the major causes of global warming and climate
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change
, which might have a catastrophic
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imapcts
on our planet and our way of life.
For example
, a recent study by the University of London has found that
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cars
emit 25% of green
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house
gases,
hence
raising the planet
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temprature
by 0. 75 degrees.
Therefore
, automobiles have a
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longterm
harmful impact.

Moving on to solutions for this issue,
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on
of the most successful measures is making
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car
ownership more expensive, which will
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make
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people
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use
public transportation more
frequently
,
therefore
,
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less
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cars
on the
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road
.
Nevertheless
, to adopt such solution, an effective
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alternatives
should be available.
For instance
, When Singapore had increased the taxes on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
by the double, it resulted in 20% less traffic on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
, plus a significant improvement in air quality
was noticed
around the city. The tax raise
was combined
with new train and metro lines and an increase of number of buses around the city,
hence
, more options for
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car
owners.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that
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governments
and international agencies should enforce new laws to take
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cars
put of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
, while at the same time give
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people
motivations to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
other methods of transportation. This would have a
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positive
effects on the communities, environment, and life quality
overall
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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