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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue v.23

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue v. 23
Modernization encourages the people to use the technology as much as possible. It is also understood that without advancement of technology no one can move further. Population is increasing day by day, which resulted in a large no of vehicles on the road. People hectic schedule and fast moving life emphasis them to use vehicles. It not only saves time but also make people to utilize that time in an important task. It cannot be denied that a large number of vehicles increasing the air pollution and noise pollution rapidly, which is a major issue for public health. All of a sudden shut down of vehicles is not a solution because it can create chaos among people. No of steps need to be taken in this issue. Alternative form of transportation can be introduced like electric cars, hydrogen made vehicles and advance public transportation and many other inspirational events can be held in aware public to use public transportation at large scale. But before doing so, we should have a hit and trail plan for strong public transportation system only then it can be executed. International law to bound people to not have more than one car is a most advance way to control vehicles on the road. We have many examples of worldwide countries which introduced the method of even-odd policy for healthy environment. In fact, China has introduced a policy of share ride policy which strict people to drive empty vehicle and huge amount of taxation on cars and fuel makes the people look after public transportation. But we have to see people will only look after for public system of travel if it is affordable and cost saving for them. We can summarize that having no of vehicles can be luxury life, but having a healthy life is the only way to live. And, strong taxation on vehicles can be a strong solution to minimize pollution.
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use
the technology as much as possible. It is
also
understood that without advancement of technology no one can
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move
further
. Population is increasing day by day, which resulted in a large
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no
of
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vehicles
on the road.
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People
hectic schedule and
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fast
moving life emphasis them to
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use
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vehicles
. It not
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only
saves time
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but
also
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make
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people
to utilize that time in an
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important
task.

It cannot
be denied
that
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a large number of
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vehicles
increasing the air pollution and noise pollution
rapidly
, which is a major issue for
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public
health. All of a sudden shut down of
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vehicles
is not a solution
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because
it can create chaos among
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people
.
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No
of steps need to
be taken
in this issue. Alternative form of
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transportation
can
be introduced
like electric cars, hydrogen made
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vehicles
and advance
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public
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transportation
and
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many
other inspirational
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events
can
be held
in aware
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public
to
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use
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public
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transportation
at large scale.
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before
doing
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so
, we should have a hit and trail plan for strong
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public
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transportation
system
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only
then it can
be executed
.

International law to bound
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people
to not have more than one car is a most advance way to control
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vehicles
on the road. We have
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many
examples of worldwide countries which introduced the method of even-odd policy for healthy environment. In fact, China has introduced a policy of share ride policy which strict
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people
to drive empty
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vehicle
and huge amount of taxation on cars and fuel
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makes
the
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people
look after
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public
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transportation
.
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we
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see
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people
will
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only
look after for
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public
system of travel if it is affordable and cost saving for them.

We can summarize that having
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no
of
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vehicles
can be luxury life,
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but
having a healthy life is the
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only
way to
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live
. And, strong taxation on
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vehicles
can be a strong solution to minimize pollution.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue v. 23

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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