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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.32

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 32
Nowadays it is argued that a plethora of vehicles is invented specifically in the United Kingdom. However, It is assumed by many that another type of transportation ought to be urged, additionally, different laws should be applied to reduce the statistic of people that own and use road machine. While I utterly agree with this argument, this essay will opine my opinion using relative illustrations. To begin with, diminishing the sum of wagon users is recommended to reduce pollution. In other words, cars, which need gas, oil and diesel to serve human beings, are the main reason behind air abuse. Thus, when decreasing the number of car in the market, the deterioration will be reduced. As a result, the planet will be less contaminated and totally healthier. To illustrate, scientists at the University of Oxford claimed that the majority of Scotland roads are auto free, where people use bicycle and scooters, which made this city less polluted world wide. Moreover, reducing the number of car owners will reduce traffic and accidents. This because the huge number of vehicles present each morning in city's road is the main cause of traffics. As a consequence, a higher percentage of car accidents. To clarify, a survey conducted by the Ministry of Labour, here in Lebanon, showed that most of the car accidents are a result of roads crowded with transportation and people in a hurry to attend their jobs. To conclude, due to air deterioration, car traffic and accidents caused by the myriad number of vehicles on the road, another way of transportation must be introduced to people. Meanwhile, I believe that this is a real threat that must be treated as a priority for all concerns.
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reduce
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people
that
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own
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use
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road
machine. While I
utterly
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agree
with this argument, this essay will opine my opinion using relative illustrations.

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begin
with, diminishing the sum of wagon users
is recommended
to
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reduce
pollution.
In other words
,
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cars
, which need gas, oil and diesel to serve human beings, are the main reason behind air abuse.
Thus
, when decreasing the
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number
of
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car
in the market, the deterioration will be
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reduced
.
As a result
, the planet will be less contaminated and
totally
healthier. To illustrate, scientists at the University of Oxford claimed that the majority of Scotland
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roads
are auto free, where
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people
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use
bicycle and scooters, which made this city less polluted
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world wide
.

Moreover
, reducing the
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number
of
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car
owners will
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reduce
traffic and
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accidents
. This
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because
the huge
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number
of vehicles present each morning in city's
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road
is the main cause of traffics. As a consequence, a higher percentage of
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car
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accidents
. To clarify, a survey conducted by the Ministry of
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Labour
, here in Lebanon,
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showed
that most of the
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car
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accidents
are a result of
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roads
crowded with transportation and
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people
in a hurry to attend their jobs.

To conclude
, due to air deterioration,
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car
traffic and
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accidents
caused by the myriad
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number
of vehicles on the
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road
, another way of transportation
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must
be introduced
to
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people
. Meanwhile, I believe that this is a real threat that
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must
be treated
as a priority for all concerns.
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 32

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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