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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.28

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 28
Number of cars on British roads are increasing day by day. It is believed that there will be approximately 29 million vehicles on these roads by the year 2000, which is a serious concern. Therefore, many people consider that the public should be encouraged to use the other transport mediums instead of using their own cars, and usages of personal vehicles ought to be controlled by introducing some global laws. I completely agree with this statement as increased usage of private vehicles is causing some serious problems to the society. To begin with, increased usage of cars leads to different types of pollutions, such as noise and air pollution. Most fossils fuel cars emit carbon gases, which pollute the air quality and as a result health of citizens gets impacted. In other words, increased amount of carbon-dioxide gas in the air reduce the oxygen inhaling capacity of people, which result in damaged lungs. As emission of such gases is directly proportional to the number of running vehicles, therefore, it is always significant to control this by motivating people to use public transport for betterment of their health. Daily use of private vehicles should be restricted as it causes traffic jam in metro cities. As everyone prefers to take their own car to commute to the office or to travel to college, it leads to more and more number of vehicles on roads. Therefore, it causes a major traffic jam situation during morning hours especially in busy areas. For instance, in a survey done by leading newspaper of India, it was found that almost 50% of the traffic jam is caused by private car owners especially professionals who do not follow traffic rules due to hurry. In conclusion, public transport will help people to move to different places without causing traffic jam and it will also be beneficial for our environment. Usage of private cars, therefore, should be discouraged for the betterment of society.
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cars
on British roads are increasing day by day. It
is believed
that there will be approximately 29 million
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vehicles
on these roads by the year 2000, which is a serious concern.
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,
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many
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people
consider that the public should
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use
the other transport mediums
instead
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cars
, and
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usages
of personal
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vehicles
ought to
be controlled
by introducing
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some
global laws. I completely
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agree
with this statement as increased
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usage
of
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private
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vehicles
is causing
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some
serious problems to the society.

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begin
with, increased
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usage
of
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cars
leads to
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different
types of pollutions, such as noise and air pollution. Most fossils fuel
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cars
emit carbon gases, which pollute the air quality and
as a result
health of citizens
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gets
impacted.
In other words
, increased amount of carbon-dioxide gas in the air
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reduce
the oxygen inhaling capacity of
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people
, which result in damaged lungs. As emission of such gases is
directly
proportional to the number of running
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vehicles
,
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therefore
, it is always significant to control this by motivating
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people
to
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use
public transport for betterment of their health.

Daily
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use
of
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private
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vehicles
should
be restricted
as it causes
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traffic
jam in metro cities. As everyone prefers to take their
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own
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car
to commute to the office or to travel to college, it leads to more and more number of
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vehicles
on roads.
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Therefore
, it causes a major
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traffic
jam situation during morning hours
especially
in busy areas.
For instance
, in a survey done by leading newspaper of India, it
was found
that almost 50% of the
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traffic
jam
is caused
by
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private
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car
owners
especially
professionals who do not follow
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traffic
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rules
due to hurry.

In conclusion
, public transport will
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help
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people
to
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move
to
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different
places without causing
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traffic
jam and it will
also
be beneficial for our environment.
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Usage
of
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private
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cars
,
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therefore
, should
be discouraged
for the betterment of society.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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