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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative trend? v.20

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 20
Nowadays, more people are prone to travelling than they did in the past. There are some reasons for this trend but I believe that this trend might offer some negative impacts. There are two main reasons why people are going on vacation more often. The first reason is that it is always interesting to go somewhere new or to experience something different from daily activities. For instance, after an exhausting week of working in a busy city, it might be a good idea to go to the countryside, away from the noise and the busy atmosphere and enjoy some fresh air. Another reason is that travelling might be the best way to gain knowledge. When travelling, people get to know about different cultures as well as people from around the world. However, this trend could have some far-reaching consequences in terms of the environment and society. An important concern for this trend is that most tourist attractions are covered with trash after the tourist season. Most people do not know how to preserve nature and are likely to leave behind a lot of garbage anywhere they go. Another negative impact is that when there is mass tourism, the local daily life and culture could be badly affected. Some tourism companies even force local people to do something different from their culture in order to attract more visitors. In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why travelling is becoming so trendy nowadays. As a result, it could lead to some negative influences on society as well as the environment.
Nowadays, more
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reasons
for this
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negative
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why
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people
are going on vacation more
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often
. The
first
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reason
is that it is always interesting to go somewhere new or to experience something
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different
from daily activities.
For instance
, after an exhausting week of working in a busy city, it might be a
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good
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idea
to go to the countryside, away from the noise and the busy atmosphere and enjoy
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some
fresh air. Another
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reason
is that
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travelling
might be the best way to gain knowledge. When
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travelling
,
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people
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get
to know about
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different
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people
from around the world.

However
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could have
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far-reaching consequences in terms of the environment and society. An
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important
concern for this
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trend
is that most tourist attractions
are covered
with trash after the tourist season. Most
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people
do not know how to preserve nature and are likely to
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leave
behind
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a lot of
garbage anywhere they go. Another
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impact is that when there is mass tourism, the local daily life and culture could be
badly
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affected
.
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tourism
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companies
even force local
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people
to do something
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different
from their culture in order to attract more visitors.

In conclusion
, there are a number of
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reasons
why
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travelling
is becoming
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so
trendy nowadays.
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, it could lead to
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some
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negative
influences on society
as well
as the environment.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative trend? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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