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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 3
Movies have become very popular in the last century. Some people prefer watching movies on their phones and tablets rather than going to the cinema while some say movies should be watched at the cinemas for a better experience. Personally, I believe that it is more convenient to watch movies on smartphones. This essay will discuss both sides of arguments in depth. On the one hand, some people found that watching movies on mobile phones and tablets is more convenient because they can watch in their flexible hours. Moreover, it is less expensive than the theatre because there is no need to buy tickets and travel for long hours to watch the movie. For instance, if someone stuck in heavy traffic for long hours then he can kill his boredom by watching a movie. Also, about 80 percent of people have easy access to all types of movies due to their smartphones. So, people can save time and money by enjoying movies at home on their mobile phones. On the other hand, some people also believe that watching movies in a cinema gives full enjoyment and excitement because these are fully equipped with the latest technology and advanced sound systems which can make the people more engaged and connected to the movie. Furthermore, the lack of distractions in cinema make the movie experience much more enjoyable. For example, research from Harvard University suggests that these days people are more likely to move towards the theatre for entertainment. So, cinema is considered an interesting place for watching movies. Should people move to cinemas or prefer phones or tablets? Some people think that cinema is costly therefore ignored, while others think that phones and tablets are easily accessible and available. This essay discussed the various reasons why people prefer theatre or smartphones for watching movies. In my opinion, people should rely on their phones for entertainment purposes as these are less expensive and convenient.
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cinemas
for a better experience.
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, I believe that it is more convenient to
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watch
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movies
on smartphones. This essay will discuss both sides of arguments in depth.

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some
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people
found that watching
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movies
on mobile
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phones
and tablets is more convenient
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because
they can
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watch
in their flexible hours.
Moreover
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theatre
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because
there is no need to
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buy
tickets and travel for long hours to
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watch
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movie
.
For instance
, if someone stuck in heavy traffic for long hours then he can kill his boredom by watching a
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movie
.
Also
, about 80 percent of
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people
have easy access to all types of
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movies
due to their smartphones.
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,
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people
can save time and money by enjoying
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movies
at home on their mobile phones.

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,
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some
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people
also
believe that watching
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movies
in a
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cinema
gives full enjoyment and excitement
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because
these are
fully
equipped with the latest technology and advanced sound systems which can
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make
the
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people
more engaged and connected to the
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movie
.
Furthermore
, the lack of distractions in
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cinema
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make
the
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movie
experience much more enjoyable.
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, research from Harvard University suggests that these days
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people
are more likely to
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move
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theatre
for entertainment.
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,
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cinema
is considered
an interesting place for watching movies.

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cinemas
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phones
or tablets?
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people
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think
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cinema
is costly
therefore
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ignored
, while others
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think
that
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phones
and tablets are
easily
accessible and available. This essay discussed the various reasons why
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people
prefer
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theatre
or smartphones for watching
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movies
. In my opinion,
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people
should rely on their
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phones
for entertainment purposes as these are less expensive and convenient.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets and there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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