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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.25

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 25
There is no gainsaid the fact that the increase of cars on the UK has become massively. I do agree the other forms of transport should definitely be implemented by the government, because this huge drift can lead to a bigger environmental problem for the future. This essay will shed a light on explaining my point of view. It is lucid that automotive companies such as 'General Motors' and 'BMW' will keep building their products if nobody say anything or converse with them; however, they need to implement new strategies to make their cars much more friendly with the environment, knowing the fact that this industry produces the second part of all greenhouse gases following just by living stock and dairy production. For instance, it is common for families in the UK to have one or more cars, they need to be aware of the cost and damage created to the natural resources, not only producing gas or petrol, but also to produce other materials like those use in the transformation fresh raw material into wheels. What is more, if governments around the world implement and promote the use of public transport, electric bicycles or electric cars like those build by 'Tesla', and/or raise the taxes of private family autos, I opine these measures will help to release part of the damage created for the planet. In compendium, for above discussed lead to the question, "will this new tax help to reduce the market of cars? " I acceded, but it is necessary to implement more than that.
There is no gainsaid the fact that the increase of
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cars
on the UK has become
massively
. I do
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agree
the other forms of transport should definitely
be implemented
by the
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government
,
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because
this huge drift can lead to a bigger environmental problem for the future. This essay will shed a light on explaining my point of view.

It is lucid that automotive
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companies
such as 'General Motors' and 'BMW' will
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keep
building their products if nobody say anything or converse with them;
however
, they need to implement new strategies to
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make
their
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cars
much more friendly with the environment, knowing the fact that this industry produces the second part of all greenhouse gases following
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just
by living stock and dairy production.

For instance
, it is common for families in the UK to have one or more
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cars
, they need to be aware of the cost and damage created to the natural resources, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
producing gas or petrol,
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but
also
to produce other materials like those
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use
in the transformation fresh raw material into wheels.
What is more
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
around the world implement and promote the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transport, electric bicycles or electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
like those build by 'Tesla', and/or raise the taxes of private family autos, I opine these measures will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to release part of the damage created for the planet.

In compendium, for above discussed lead to the question,
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"
will this new tax
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help
to
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reduce
the market of
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cars
?
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
I acceded,
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but
it is necessary to implement more than that.
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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