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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. v.22

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 22
Cars have been an essential part of our day-to-day life. Since its first appearance in England in 1888, there have been produced as many as 29 million cars by the year 2000, which led to many people think that with this rate, we will have to find an alternative way of transportation and introduce new international laws to keep the car ownership in a stable level. I believe there are some ways we can tackle this problem. One way is that public transportation should be free for all social groups. I think the government should make all the transportation (trains, busses, etc) Free of charge, so that people use these ways to travel instead of cars. Consequently, this will result in a sharp increase in tourism since they could travel to any part of the country they're visiting whenever they want for free. For instance, Japan's tourism has skyrocketed over the years, as a result of free metro stations, and it is experiencing the biggest decline in car usage of any nation, more than the next 4 countries combined. Another way of dealing with excessive cars is raising the gas prices so much that the citizens will have no choice but to use alternative ways. Moreover, it could make the nation an economic power if the government decides to sell the unused petrol to neighbouring countries. Singapore is the primary example of this where prices for gas and vehicles are so high that Singaporeans are forced to use buses, trains, metros, etc. In addition, they sell the petrol to other nations, becoming one of the most developed countries in the world. In conclusion, I believe that car usage is a world problem that should not be overlooked, and we should start taking action against it by learning from those who managed to solve this issue before it's too late.
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have been an essential part of our day-to-day life. Since its
first
appearance in England in 1888, there have
been produced
as
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as 29 million
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cars
by the year 2000, which led to
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people
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think
that with this rate, we will
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have to
find an alternative
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way
of transportation and introduce new international laws to
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keep
the
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car
ownership in a stable level. I believe there are
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some
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ways
we can tackle this problem.

One
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way
is that public transportation should be
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free
for all social groups. I
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think
the
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government
should
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make
all the transportation (trains, busses, etc)
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of charge,
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that
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people
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these
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ways
to travel
instead
of
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cars
.
Consequently
, this will result in a sharp increase in tourism since they could travel to any part of the
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country
they're visiting whenever they want for
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free
.
For instance
, Japan's tourism has skyrocketed over the years,
as a result
of
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free
metro stations, and it is experiencing the biggest decline in
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car
usage of any nation, more than the
next
4
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countries
combined.

Another
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way
of dealing with excessive
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cars
is raising the gas prices
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so
much that the citizens will have no choice
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but
to
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use
alternative
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ways
.
Moreover
, it could
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make
the nation an economic power if the
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government
decides to sell the unused petrol to
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neighbouring
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countries
. Singapore is the primary example of this where prices for gas and vehicles are
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so
high that Singaporeans
are forced
to
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use
buses, trains, metros, etc.
In addition
, they sell the petrol to other nations, becoming one of the most developed
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countries
in the world.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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car
usage is a world problem that should not
be overlooked
, and we should
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start
taking action against it by learning from those who managed to solve this issue
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before
it's too late.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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