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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.19

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 19
It has been argued that whether we should encourage the different types of transportation and universal laws which are about ownership and control the car use as there has been a lot of personal and public transport in Britain roughly 29 million. And as far as I am concerned, both can be correct. On the one hand, people need special vehicles, mostly time and they might not want to take a bus. The reason can be their demands or their emergencies. For instance, a person may not want to use mass transport and choose his or her own vehicle because he or she may think that not only they are not clear but also not comfortable as a special vehicle is. Also, it can be a state of emergency. A person can have a patient that needs to go to a hospital or that the patient can be himself or herself. In this scenario, you do not look for public transit since the situation is very urgent. On the other hand, having a lot of cars and using them can increase the traffic by extremely. Think about 50 people in their special vehicle separately and think of them as they are in just one bus in a different scenario. Which situation can increase the traffic? Yes, having special cars can definitely grow the traffic. In conclusion, it is an arguable debate and even I personally have mixed feelings about it. In my opinion, a person should have a personal car, but also use public transit if the situation is not urgent.
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that whether we should encourage the
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personal and public transport in Britain roughly 29 million. And as far as I
am concerned
, both can be correct.

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,
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time and
they might not want to take a bus. The reason can be their demands or their emergencies.
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, a person may not want to
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use
mass transport and choose
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is.

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On the other hand
, having
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extremely
.
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about 50
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separately
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of them as they are in
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one bus in a
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scenario. Which situation can increase the traffic? Yes, having
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special
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cars
can definitely grow the traffic.

In conclusion
, it is an arguable debate and even I
personally
have mixed feelings about it. In my opinion, a person should have a personal
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car
,
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but
also
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use
public transit if the situation is not urgent.
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 19

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
261 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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